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Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this the case? Is it a negative or positive development? v.3

Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this the case? Is it a negative or positive development? v. 3
Modern times have shown popularity for larger scale weddings, incurring high costs compared to weddings organised in the past. The reasons for this trend will be analysed as well as why it can be seen as both beneficial and harmful to society. One of the main reasons for spending money on such extravagant weddings is that people want a memorable and special day. A marriage is considered very important in many cultures and it is imperative that the day symbolises this fact by any means possible. Such an occasion brings family and friends together to share this special event in their lives so there is a lot of pressure to impress their guests. Furthermore, external factors from our society and within the media, influence people’s perception of how a wedding should be conducted. Ideas of fairytale style weddings and romantic stories from real-life celebrity weddings, heighten our sensation and lust for mind-blowing weddings. It can be incredibly satisfying for couples to imitate such lavishness and special treatment as a mark of social status, wealth and importance. However, such an investment into weddings can pose detrimental effects for young married couples. It is common for financial problems to occur, such as finding funds to mortgage a new home. Many couples would need to save money for the future and consider the needs of starting a family. Expenses such as childcare, education and paying bills would be an obstacle for many new families. These vital and necessary expenditures are seen as priorities for thrifty couples who choose to have smaller scale and inexpensive weddings. A wedding lasts for only a day compared to a lifetime of money troubles. However, the media and external influences place pressure on many couples to host such large weddings, which inevitably causes many couples to come into severe debt. In conclusion, luxurious and large scale weddings satisfy people’s need to mark a special occasion, but to also experience being as important as a star on their special day. However, this could bring couples endless financial worries for the future.
Modern times have shown popularity for larger scale
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weddings
, incurring high costs compared to
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weddings
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in the past. The reasons for this trend will be
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as well
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seen
as both beneficial and harmful to society.

One of the main reasons for spending money on such extravagant
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weddings
is that
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people
want a memorable and
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special
day. A marriage
is considered
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very
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important
in
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many
cultures and it is imperative that the day
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symbolises
this fact by any means possible. Such an occasion brings family and friends together to share this
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special
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event
in their
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lives
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so
there is
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a lot of
pressure to impress their guests.
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people
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should
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.
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Ideas
of
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fairytale
style
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and romantic stories from real-life celebrity
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, heighten our sensation and lust for mind-blowing
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weddings
. It can be
incredibly
satisfying for
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couples
to imitate such lavishness and
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special
treatment as a mark of social status, wealth and importance.

However
, such an investment into
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weddings
can pose detrimental effects for young married
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couples
. It is common for financial problems to occur, such as finding funds to mortgage a new home.
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Many
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couples
would need to save money for the future and consider the needs of starting a family. Expenses such as childcare, education and paying bills would be an obstacle for
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many
new families. These vital and necessary expenditures are
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seen
as priorities for thrifty
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couples
who choose to have smaller scale and inexpensive
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weddings
. A
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wedding
lasts for
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only
a day compared to a lifetime of money troubles.
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, the media and external influences place pressure on
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many
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couples
to host such large
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weddings
, which
inevitably
causes
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many
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couples
to
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come
into severe debt.

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, luxurious and large scale
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weddings
satisfy
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people
’s need to mark a
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special
occasion,
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but
to
also
experience being as
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important
as a star on their
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special
day.
However
, this could bring
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couples
endless financial worries for the future.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this the case? Is it a negative or positive development? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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