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many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? v.26

many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? v. 26
It is a universal truth that trees play a crucial role in the environment, whereas some people think that empty space in urban areas should be utilized by planting, other argue that these spaces should be authorised for more housing facilities. I am favour of the former notion since I believe trees provide us various kinds of things. To begin with, no one can imagine their life without trees as they are the only source of oxygen, which human intake. First and foremost, reducing oxygen in the environment is a serious issue. To explain, due to increasing population, individuals ruin forests for their residents that they diminish their own way roots to live. If we continued deforestation, it would become harmful not only for humans, but also for animals, hence, it is a responsibility of everyone, generating oxygen by planting trees around themselves. For example, our capital, New Delhi has not good quality air. Recently, I read a news in social media that people purchase oxygen to intake fresh breathe, due to higher proportions of pollution and less numbers of trees. Furthermore, trees are used for medicine. To explicate, from ancient times, our ancestors used leaves, bark, roots and so on for medical usage, and still it is being used to formulate different vaccines. There are many examples where allopathic drugs and Ayurvedic herbs have integrated, as a result, they beat disease successfully, and could save lots of lives. For instance, we can see the latest brochure of cough syrup where Toulouse and ginger added as a traditional way. On the contrary, humans, who think that vacant place should be used for housing estates to develop infrastructure and multi-storey buildings to enhance their way of living even if the town has bad air quality, and the large ratio of patients, who struggle with breathing disease, such as asthma, tuberculosis and so on, so that it is the worst idea to be sick than increase their age with planting trees, where we can do it. Finally, it can be said that all the living beings are dependent on each other, so if we need to balance all the things on the earth, we should plant trees to reduce various illnesses and encourage biodiversity. .
It is a universal truth that
trees
play a crucial role in the environment, whereas
some
people
think
that empty space in urban areas should
be utilized
by planting, other argue that these spaces should be
authorised
for more housing facilities. I am
favour
of the former notion since I believe
trees
provide us various kinds of things.

To
begin
with, no one can imagine their life without
trees
as they are the
only
source of oxygen, which human intake.
First
and foremost, reducing oxygen in the environment is a serious issue. To
explain
, due to increasing population, individuals ruin forests for their residents that they diminish their
own
way roots to
live
. If we continued deforestation, it would become harmful not
only
for humans,
but
also
for animals,
hence
, it is a responsibility of everyone, generating oxygen by planting
trees
around themselves.
For example
, our capital, New Delhi has not
good
quality air. Recently, I read
a news
in social media that
people
purchase
oxygen to intake fresh breathe, due to higher proportions of pollution and
less
numbers of trees.

Furthermore
,
trees
are
used
for medicine. To explicate, from ancient times, our ancestors
used
leaves
, bark, roots and
so
on for medical usage, and
still
it is being
used
to formulate
different
vaccines. There are
many
examples where allopathic drugs and Ayurvedic herbs have integrated,
as a result
, they beat disease
successfully
, and could save lots of
lives
.
For instance
, we can
see
the latest brochure of cough syrup where Toulouse and ginger
added
as a traditional way.

On the contrary
, humans, who
think
that vacant place should be
used
for housing estates to develop infrastructure and
multi-storey
buildings to enhance their way of living even if the town has
bad
air quality, and the large ratio of patients, who struggle with breathing disease, such as asthma, tuberculosis and
so
on,
so
that it is the worst
idea
to be
sick
than increase their age with planting
trees
, where we can do it.

Finally
, it can
be said
that all the living beings are dependent on each other,
so
if we need to balance all the things on the earth, we should plant
trees
to
reduce
various illnesses and encourage biodiversity.
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem? v. 26

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