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Many university students live with their families, while others live away fromtheir home because their universities are in different places. What are theadvantages and disadvantages of both situations? v.1

Many university students live with their families, while others live away fromtheir home because their universities are in different places. What are theadvantages and disadvantages of both situations? v. 1
In recent times, we all face a lot of problems that threaten our lives. With the increase of environmental concerning issues such as global warming, spreading infections and increasing drought. Some people think that the best way to tackle this frightening issue is by deal with the dilemma globally, while others believe that every nation have to solve their complication individually. Both points of views will be discussed and evaluated before draw the final conclusion. It can be seen that there are so many factors that play a major role in destroying our planet. Whether these factors are resulted from human activities or natural sources. People who advocate the idea of solving environmental problems in global domain are strongly believing in the benefit of cooperative work. When many countries work together to alleviate high temperature level by reducing the reliance on fossil fuels, this simple action will be effective in creating a cooling environment. Moreover, governments from many different parts of the world can build an efficient communication to discuss the matter, thus improving and expanding their potential solutions. For example, many developing countries can benefit from scientific researches that are done in developing countries. On the other hand, proponents to the suggestion of every country has to solve its environmental problem may think that is difficult to some countries to deal with the subject in large scale because they may have less environmental problems than other countries. In other words, Some small countries like Bahrain does not have as much environmental problems as major and large city like Tokyo. As we all know that a lot of hurricanes and floods happen in Japan every year, so the Japanese have long experience with this kind of disaster will Bahrain know nothing about it. Finally, When people have the ability to understand the issue, they will find a better solution to deal and solve it with no need the interfere others. In conclusion, I believe that we all live in the same world which require a lot from us. Environmental issues is absolutely a global concern that need to be wisely solved. One hand cannot clap, so countries have to broaden their efforts to save and protect the life in this invaluable planet to make it a better place for next generation. By supporting cooperation between countries, especially those that focus on a scientific approach, will ensure continuing live in a safe environment.
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issues
such as global warming, spreading infections and increasing drought.
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people
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that the best way to tackle this frightening
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is by deal with the dilemma globally, while others believe that every nation
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have to
solve their complication
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. Both points of views will
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factors that play a major role in destroying our planet. Whether these factors
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from human activities or natural sources.
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who advocate the
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idea
of solving
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environmental
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problems
in global domain are
strongly
believing in the benefit of cooperative work. When
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many
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countries
work together to alleviate high temperature level by reducing the reliance on fossil fuels, this simple action will be effective in creating a cooling environment.
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,
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governments
from
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different
parts of the world can build an efficient communication to discuss the matter,
thus
improving and expanding their potential solutions.
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,
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developing
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developing countries
.

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country
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environmental
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to deal with the subject in large scale
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environmental
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small
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like Bahrain does not have as much
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environmental
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problems
as major and large city like Tokyo. As we all know that
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hurricanes and floods happen in Japan every year,
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experience
with this kind of disaster will Bahrain know nothing about it.
Finally
, When
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people
have the ability to understand the
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, they will find a better solution to deal and solve it with no need
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, I believe that we all
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live
in the same world which require a lot from us.
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Environmental
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issues
is
absolutely
a global concern that need to be
wisely
solved. One hand cannot clap,
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so
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countries
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have to
broaden their efforts to save and protect the life in this invaluable planet to
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make
it a better place for
next
generation. By supporting cooperation between
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countries
,
especially
those that focus on a scientific approach, will ensure continuing
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live
in a safe environment.
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IELTS essay Many university students live with their families, while others live away fromtheir home because their universities are in different places. What are theadvantages and disadvantages of both situations? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
402 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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