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Many university students live with their families while others live away from home because their universities are in different places What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations v.10

Many university students live with their families while others live away from home because their universities are in different places What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations v. 10
Nowadays. There is a common sense of satisfaction among all the people to have their car while the other means of transportation should be advised by the governments to set laws for car owners and motivate them to use public transportation. I agree with this subject because the large numbers of cars need more parking lots and they will have an undoubted effect on the environment. On the one hand, having a car becomes a value in our modern society and it shows your good financial position and this notion caused many issues for authorities. For instance, they have to construct more vacant places for people to park their cars and for this reason, they have to spend some parts of the public budget on this subject instead of using it to amend the life quality or enhance the utilities of hospitals and medical facilities. Furthermore, they have to reshape and redesign the roads and it consumes more money. So, they should set a restrict amount of money for cars and roads and try to lower it step by step annually. On the other hand, another effect of this uprising trend among people of the world, that is caused by more pollutions and released by more dioxide carbon emissions to the air. For example, I have read an article and the main point was that a principal reason for increasing temperature on earth and also the thinness of the ozone layer is cars because when we use cars, it burns fossil fuels and it produces more CO2. besides that, it can be harmful to natural habitats and caused a lot of problems for animals and make them leave their houses. So, one of the crucial effects of this amount of cars may cause numerous difficulties for natural worlds and also animals. In conclusion, I assume that we have to make strong laws for cars and try to make people use electric cars and encourage them to use public transportation and bikes, which could be a game-changer for our planet.
Nowadays. There is a common sense of satisfaction among all the
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people
to have their
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car
while the other means of transportation should
be advised
by the
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governments
to set laws for
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car
owners and motivate them to
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use
public transportation. I
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agree
with this subject
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because
the large numbers of
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cars
need more parking
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lots and
they will have an undoubted effect on the environment.

On the one hand, having a
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car
becomes a value in our modern society and it
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shows
your
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good
financial position and this notion caused
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many
issues for authorities.
For instance
, they
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have to
construct more vacant places for
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people
to park their
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cars
and
for this reason
, they
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have to
spend
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some
parts of the public budget on this subject
instead
of using it to amend the life quality or enhance the utilities of hospitals and medical facilities.
Furthermore
, they
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have to
reshape and redesign the roads and it consumes more money.
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So
, they should set
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a restrict
amount of money for
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cars
and roads and try to lower it step by step
annually
.

On the other hand
, another effect of this uprising trend among
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people
of the world, that
is caused
by more pollutions and released by more dioxide carbon emissions to the air.
For example
, I have read an article and the main point was that a principal reason for increasing temperature on earth and
also
the thinness of the ozone layer is
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cars
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because
when we
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use
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cars
, it burns fossil fuels and it produces more CO2.
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besides
that, it can be harmful to natural habitats and caused
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a lot of
problems for animals and
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make
them
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leave
their
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houses
.
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So
, one of the crucial effects of this amount of
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cars
may cause numerous difficulties for natural worlds and
also
animals.

In conclusion
, I assume that we
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have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
strong laws for
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cars
and try to
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make
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people
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use
electric
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cars
and encourage them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transportation and bikes, which could be a game-changer for our planet.
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IELTS essay Many university students live with their families while others live away from home because their universities are in different places What are the advantages and disadvantages both situations v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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