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Integrated speaking ( question 5)The professor forgot his meeting with environmental club to talk about his science prize v.1

Integrated speaking ( question 5)The professor forgot his meeting with environmental club to talk about his science prize v. 1
According to some individuals, Employees should pay attention to the quality of work rather than employers’ clothes. However, I think that companies with employers putting on nasty clothes is more successful. On the one hand, some people believe that every employer turns to focus on its appearance is just a waste of time. Because, in the workplaces there may be workers who work in an industrial zone, and they're wearing smart clothes is not necessary. If workers pay attention to style of clothes, there, they may lose some time. Moreover, some smart clothes are not convenient in industrial zone, which may cause workers to lose energy to clean them. Thereby, it might be true that only senior position workers should put on nasty clothes. From another angle, to my mind there are lots of effective sides of that every employer of any organization wears nasty clothes. For instance, somehow they may advertise their products or their workplace thanks to wearing smart clothes. Because well-dressed workers may leave positive comments on customers. Nowadays, a major part of consumers are paying attention products’ background features such as their package or advertisement. If workers pay attention their clothes deeply, costumers may think that the products are made by professional workers. Striking example can be KFS. Every worker of KFS puts on smart clothes from cooker till worker who take products to customer. Owing to this aspect they have gained a lot of consumers. To conclude, although wearing smart clothes at any time in the workplace is sometimes thought as a waste of time, I consider it has so many other beneficial causes, due to its good advertisement aspect.
According to
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some
individuals, Employees should pay
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attention
to the quality of work
rather
than
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employers’
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clothes
.
However
, I
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think
that
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companies
with
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employers
putting on nasty
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clothes
is more successful.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
believe that every
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employer
turns to focus on its appearance is
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just
a waste of
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time
.
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Because
, in the workplaces there may be
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workers
who work in an industrial zone, and they're wearing
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smart
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clothes
is not necessary. If
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workers
pay
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attention
to style of
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clothes
, there, they may lose
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some
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time
.
Moreover
,
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some
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smart
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clothes
are not convenient in industrial zone, which may cause
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workers
to lose energy to clean them. Thereby, it might be true that
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only
senior position
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workers
should put on nasty clothes.

From another angle, to my mind there are lots of effective sides of that every
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employer
of any organization wears nasty
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clothes
.
For instance
, somehow they may advertise their
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products
or their workplace thanks to wearing
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smart
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clothes
.
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Because
well-dressed
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workers
may
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leave
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positive
comments on customers. Nowadays, a major part of consumers are paying
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attention
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products’
background features such as their package or advertisement. If
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workers
pay
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attention
their
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clothes
deeply
, costumers may
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think
that the
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products
are made
by professional
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workers
. Striking example can be
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KFS
. Every
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worker
of
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KFS
puts on
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smart
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clothes
from cooker till
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worker
who take
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products
to customer. Owing to this aspect they have gained
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a lot of
consumers.

To conclude
, although wearing
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smart
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clothes
at any
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time
in the workplace is
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sometimes
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thought
as a waste of
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time
, I consider it has
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so
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many
other beneficial causes, due to its
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good
advertisement aspect.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Integrated speaking ( question 5)The professor forgot his meeting with environmental club to talk about his science prize v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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