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17. Teachers can gain a reputation for being just, or fair, with students. Whatfeatures make a teacher seem fair to students? v.1

17. Teachers can gain a reputation for being just, or fair, with students. Whatfeatures make a teacher seem fair to students? v. 1
Some individuals are of the opinion that the government should assist people with no jobs every week. In my opinion, I support leaders to put up some measures on how to make men and women without work to be comfortable as much as possible. Firstly, there is a belief that quotes " an idle man is a devil's workshop". Since the heads of the society are concerned about the safety of their people, as this is part of the reason they are in power, it would be needful for them to ensure the unemployed are being supported every week in order not to encourage robbery, hoodlums and destruction of properties and bad attitudes which can arise from not being occupied with things to do. Also, if it's on a yearly or monthly basis, men with no jobs might be too slothful to seek for job opportunities as they'll become too dependent on the leaders for their upkeep. For example, there was a certain study done in Afghanistan on the reason why men are not taking up jobs any longer. The major reason was the yearly incentives received by the unemployed, leaving the jobs for immigrants. However, when they are helped every week, it saves the money spent on them than a yearly in some basis or otherwise. For example, governance has to do with adequate planning and proper management of available resources which won't be achieved if payment is done otherwise. In conclusion, ensuring support to men without jobs is done weekly as this will safe the heads of the general public in working towards achieving the plan they have for the populace and also keeping the environment sane, ensuring it's free from hoodlums and touts.
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individuals are of the opinion that the
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government
should assist
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people
with no
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jobs
every week. In my opinion, I support leaders to put up
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measures on how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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men
and women without work to be comfortable as much as possible.

Firstly
, there is a belief that quotes
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"
an idle
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
is a devil's workshop
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"
. Since the heads of the society
are concerned
about the safety of their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, as this is part of the reason they are in power, it would be needful for them to ensure the unemployed are
being supported
every week in order not to encourage robbery, hoodlums and destruction of properties and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
attitudes which can arise from not
being occupied
with things to do.

Also
, if it's on a yearly or monthly basis,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
men
with no
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
might be too slothful to seek for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
opportunities as they'll become too dependent on the leaders for their upkeep.
For example
, there was a certain study done in Afghanistan on the reason why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
men
are not taking up
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
any longer. The major reason was the yearly incentives received by the unemployed, leaving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
for immigrants.

However
, when they are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
every week, it saves the money spent on them than a yearly in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
basis or
otherwise
.
For example
, governance
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has to
do with adequate planning and proper management of available resources which won't
be achieved
if payment
is done
otherwise
.

In conclusion
, ensuring support to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
men
without
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
is done
weekly as this will safe the heads of the
Consider using "public".
general public
in working towards achieving the plan they have for the populace and
also
keeping the environment sane, ensuring
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it's
free from hoodlums and touts.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS essay 17. Teachers can gain a reputation for being just, or fair, with students. Whatfeatures make a teacher seem fair to students? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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