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Many people welcome the opening of shopping areas near their homes. On the other hand, some people are strongly opposed to the construction of such facilities. If the opening of a large shopping center in your neighborhood were announced, would you supp v.1

Many people welcome the opening of shopping areas near their homes. On the other hand, some people are strongly opposed to the construction of such facilities. If the opening of a large shopping center in your neighborhood were announced, would you supp v. 1
A big building as a shopping center would provide us a lot of benefits, not only for me but for my neighborhood and even my city. This construction would afford more jobs, options to buy things and hangout with friends and family. The number of unemployed people are increasing in my city and today achieved the highest level of the last 5 years. Unfortunately, I am one of those but hopefully with this new construction will offer a lot of new jobs. I have been looking for a job for almost a year, I have friends that is waiting for more than that. Actually, many people was thinking about move to the city, because some of then do not have even a minimum wage to survive. Fortunately, all the citizens of Polur will considering to remain in our amazing city. In addition, Polur is an inner city, we do not have many options to go shopping. Currently, when we need to buy something, we need to travel almost 5 hours to another city nearby that have a shopping center. However, if we would have a shopping center here, would be so much comfortable. Such as we are promoting the growing of Polur. Last but not least, we would have fun by going to the movies because there are not cinema in Polur. Nowadays, it is almost impossible to find a city without a cinema. Also, we would playing games with friends and family, eating a different taste of food in food court. Everyone will enjoy about this construction. For those reasons, I feel that building a shopping mall nearby will provide a big advance for my inner city. Everyone will love, for sure!
A
big
building as a
shopping
center would provide us
a lot of
benefits, not
only
for me
but
for my neighborhood and even my city. This construction would afford more jobs, options to
buy
things and hangout with friends and family.

The number of unemployed
people
are
increasing in my city and
today
achieved the highest level of the last 5 years. Unfortunately, I am one of those
but
hopefully
with this new construction will offer
a lot of
new jobs. I have been looking for a job for almost a year, I have friends
that is
waiting for more than that. Actually,
many
people
was thinking about
move
to the city,
because
some of then
do not have even a minimum wage to survive.
Fortunately
, all the citizens of
Polur
will
considering to remain
in our amazing city.

In addition
,
Polur
is an inner city, we do not have
many
options to go
shopping
.
Currently
, when we need to
buy
something, we need to travel almost 5 hours to another city nearby that have a
shopping
center.
However
, if we would have a
shopping
center here, would be
so
much comfortable. Such as we are promoting the growing of
Polur
.

Last
but
not least, we would have fun by going to the movies
because
there are not cinema in
Polur
. Nowadays, it is almost impossible to find a city without a cinema.
Also
, we would
playing
games with friends and family, eating a
different
taste of food in food court. Everyone will enjoy about this construction.

For those reasons, I feel that building a
shopping
mall nearby will provide a
big
advance for my inner city. Everyone will
love
, for sure!
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people welcome the opening of shopping areas near their homes. On the other hand, some people are strongly opposed to the construction of such facilities. If the opening of a large shopping center in your neighborhood were announced, would you supp v. 1

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