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Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? Are there more advantages than disadvantages? v.1

Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? Are there more advantages than disadvantages? v. 1
In a bid to bridge the gap between communication, more innovations are being made. Nowadays, owing to its affordability and convenience people now prefer to send information via text messaging than phone calls. In my opinion, I believe that the drawback supersedes the benefits with a number of reasons. To begin with, individuals now prefer to send text messages because it is less expensive and more convenient. In other words, money spent on sending messages to people is cheaper when compared with making calls. As a result, an individual would rather go for the method because one can even send lengthy messages without spending too much. For example, in Nigeria, the amount it costs to make a one minute call is 3x more than what it would take a send a text. Also, expressing one's self via text messaging is more convenient. This is because one can send a message to someone at any time, regardless of the location of the person and get a reply. Whereas, if a call is put across to a person in a busy place, he will have no choice than to suspend the call until he gets to a less noisy place. Admittedly, a major benefit of sending a text is that it is time-saving. In other words, less time is required to convey a message to the recipient unlike over phone calls. For example, according to a survey carried out by the Nigerian Telecommunications, people said they preferred to send texts than make calls because it took them less time in passing the message across. Nevertheless, despite this advantage, the major drawback to text messaging is that it could be restricting. In other words, in a situation where the mobile phone owner is not an English literate, he will not be able to express himself via typing. For example, a man who was just gifted a phone by his child found it difficult sending messages during an emergency situation. This would have been avoided if he used the call option instead. Another downside of text messaging is that it could be used to mask one's feelings. A person can easily lie about the way he feels through text messaging whereas it is very difficult to hide your feelings over phone calls. In conclusion, people benefit from sending texts because it is cheaper and more convenient. Despite this, the restricting drawback of using text message as a means of communication makes it less beneficial to making phone calls.
In a bid to bridge the gap between communication, more innovations are
being made
. Nowadays, owing to its affordability and convenience
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people
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now
prefer to
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send
information via
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text
messaging than
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phone
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calls
. In my opinion, I believe that the drawback supersedes the benefits with a number of reasons.

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begin
with, individuals
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now
prefer to
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send
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text
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messages
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because
it is
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less
expensive and more convenient.
In other words
, money spent on
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sending
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messages
to
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people
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is
cheaper when compared with making
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calls
.
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, an individual would
rather
go for the method
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because
one can even
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send
lengthy
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messages
without spending too much.
For example
, in Nigeria, the amount it costs to
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make
a
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one minute
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call
is 3x more than what it would take a
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send
a
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text
.
Also
, expressing one's self via
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text
messaging is more convenient. This is
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because
one can
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send
a
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message
to someone at any time, regardless of the location of the person and
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get
a reply. Whereas, if a
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call
is put
across to a person in a busy place, he will have no choice than to suspend the
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call
until he
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gets
to a
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less
noisy place.

Admittedly
, a major benefit of
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sending
a
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text
is that it is time-saving.
In other words
,
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less
time
is required
to convey a
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message
to the recipient unlike over
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phone
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calls
.
For example
, according to a survey carried out by the Nigerian Telecommunications,
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people
said they preferred to
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send
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texts
than
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make
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calls
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because
it took them
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less
time in passing the
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message
across.

Nevertheless
, despite this advantage, the major drawback to
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text
messaging is that it could be restricting.
In other words
, in a situation where the mobile
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phone
owner is not an English literate, he will not be able to express himself via typing.
For example
, a
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man
who was
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just
gifted a
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phone
by his child found it difficult
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sending
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messages
during an emergency situation. This would have
been avoided
if he
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used
the
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call
option
instead
. Another downside of
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text
messaging is that it could be
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used
to mask one's feelings. A person can
easily
lie about the way he feels through
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text
messaging whereas it is
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very
difficult to
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hide
your feelings over
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phone
calls.

In conclusion
,
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people
benefit from
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sending
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texts
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because
it is cheaper and more convenient. Despite this, the restricting drawback of using
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text
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message
as a means of communication
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makes
it
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less
beneficial to making
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phone
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calls
.
24Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people today use their phones for sending texts more than talking. What are the reasons for this? Are there more advantages than disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
414 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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