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Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. To what extent do you agree with this view? Support your opinion with relevant examples. v.3

Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. Support your opinion with relevant examples. v. 3
We all need elaborate preparation for our career. However, it is too extreme to think that we should decide our career since we are kids and chase it whole our life to become excellent specialists. I am completely opposed to that idea. First, there are so many risks of failure to convert our dream into real success meanwhile we have to earn a living. Many people are so talented at their fields but not able to live with the jobs. For example, thirty years ago in my country, few scientists could live with their starving salaries despite of their great scientific works. My father had to quit his job as a professor at a university, establishing his own business to have enough finance resource to raise me and my sister. In an opposite circumstance, my friend had to stop chasing his dream to become a singer because of his lack of the required qualities. Second, few people have enough knowledge and experience to make that crucial decision at their young ages. When my handsome friend was a child, he used to desire to gain an Oscar award as an actor. Gradually, his dream had faded away when he realized the negative side of fame, such as lack of privacy and exploitation, and the severe pressure he should have to work under. Meanwhile, other people suddenly figured out their destiny at their middle ages. The author of Harry Porter only became famous after long years of raising her children with welfare from the government. In short, we would easily make mistakes of deciding on jobs when we are young. Right choices are only made with mature understandings, life experience and sometimes good luck. People need sound finance to chase their dreams in the risky world.
We all need elaborate preparation for our career.
However
, it is too extreme to
think
that we should decide our career since we are kids and chase it whole our life to become excellent specialists. I am completely opposed to that
idea
.

First
, there are
so
many
risks
of failure to convert our
dream
into real success meanwhile we
have to
earn a living.
Many
people
are
so
talented at their fields
but
not able to
live
with the jobs.
For example
, thirty years ago in my country, few scientists could
live
with their starving salaries
despite of
their great scientific works. My father had to quit his job as a professor at a university, establishing his
own
business to have
enough
finance resource to raise me and my sister. In an opposite circumstance, my friend had to
stop
chasing his
dream
to become a singer
because
of his lack of the required qualities.

Second, few
people
have
enough
knowledge and experience to
make
that crucial decision at their young ages. When my handsome friend was a child, he
used
to desire to gain an Oscar award as an actor.
Gradually
, his
dream
had faded away when he realized the
negative
side of fame, such as lack of privacy and exploitation, and the severe pressure he should
have to
work under. Meanwhile, other
people
suddenly
figured out their destiny at their
middle ages
. The author of Harry Porter
only
became
famous
after long years of raising her children with welfare from the
government
.

In short, we would
easily
make
mistakes of deciding on jobs when we are young. Right choices are
only
made with mature understandings, life experience and
sometimes
good
luck.
People
need sound finance to chase their
dreams
in the risky world.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. Support your opinion with relevant examples. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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