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Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. To what extent do you agree with this view? Support your opinion with relevant examples. v.1

Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. Support your opinion with relevant examples. v. 1
The Majority of the people think that excelling in your job depends on whether you choose the career path earlier in life or not. This essay will discuss on why I disagree with it along with the help of some examples. Life is all about experiencing new things. We cannot expect when we will be able to find out what we love to do. As a child, I wanted to be a bus driver, but that changed as I grew up. We grow up and find see what happens in a lot of careers and even get a chance to do some in the process. After a month or two, we will be able to identify if we are in the right place or not. Colonel Sanders was above 70 years old when he found his passion and we all know how great KFC is. Another example would be Jack Ma, who was overlooked by a KFC outlet into deciding that he is not a right fit to be a waiter there. They all tried and did different jobs in their life and eventually found what they had to do with their life. I do accept that there are a lot of people who decide on their careers when they are very young and be successful. They are either fortunate people or really good hardworking, who were guided in the right way. As a conclusion, Success in your career depends on what you do and whether you love to do it or not. Once you find out what to do, becoming a specialist will be a piece of cake.
The Majority of the
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people
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that excelling in your job depends on whether you choose the
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career
path earlier in life or not. This essay will discuss on why I disagree with it along with the
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help
of
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some
examples.

Life is all about experiencing new things. We cannot
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expect
when we will be able to find out what we
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love
to do. As a child, I wanted to be a bus driver,
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but
that
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changed
as I grew up. We grow up and find
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see
what happens in
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a lot of
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careers
and even
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get
a chance to do
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some
in the process. After a month or two, we will be able to identify if we are in the right place or not. Colonel Sanders was above 70 years
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old
when he found his
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passion and
we all know how great KFC is. Another example would be Jack Ma, who
was overlooked
by a KFC outlet into deciding that he is not a right fit to be a waiter there. They all tried and did
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different
jobs in their life and
eventually
found what they had to do with their life.

I do accept that there are
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a lot of
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people
who decide on their
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careers
when they are
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very
young and be successful. They are either fortunate
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people
or
really
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good
hardworking, who
were guided
in the right way.

As a conclusion, Success in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
career
depends on what you do and whether you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to do it or not. Once you find out what to do, becoming a specialist will be a piece of cake.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people think that to become a successful specialist it's better to choose a career early in life and never change it later. Support your opinion with relevant examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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