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Many people think that the media should show more stories which report good news. To what extend do you agree or disagree v.2

Many people think that the media should show more stories which report good news. v. 2
Nowadays, our lives is influenced by media deeply. Therefore, people think that more good news should be reported on all sort of media. I partly agree with this It is true that the good news makes viewers feel happier and healthier life. For instance, the news is about a charitable organization conduct free heart surgery for many children that make people more emotionally and shape their outlook on society in a positive way. Further more, negative news cause a undersirable on society an influence on thoughts and actions of viewers, especially teenagers. They have no enough awareness to distinguish between good and bad. Crime scenes or violent scenes showed is absolutely having an impact on their behaviors and the imitative actions is impossible avoided. It is hard to educate teenagers if there are many violent scenes showed on most of media channel. On the other hand, a report about bad news is also helpful to some extent. For example, when people read news about violent crime, they are terrified and more cautious. The women will not go out to late, parents will pay more attention to their children. Moreover, the images of the dead and injured in historic floods make the viewers feel unhappy and down mood in the life, but it is also warns people of their responsibilities for the natural and environment. In conclusion, I think the number of good and bad news should be equivalent to encourage audiences to have complete overview of particular issue.
Nowadays, our
lives
is influenced
by media
deeply
.
Therefore
,
people
think
that more
good
news
should
be reported
on all sort of media. I partly
agree
with
this


It is true that the
good
news
makes
viewers feel happier and healthier life.
For instance
, the
news
is about a charitable organization conduct free heart surgery for
many
children that
make
people
more
emotionally
and shape their outlook on society in a
positive
way.
Further
more,
negative
news
cause
a
undersirable
on society an influence on thoughts and actions of viewers,
especially
teenagers
. They have no
enough
awareness to distinguish between
good
and
bad
. Crime scenes or violent scenes
showed
is
absolutely
having an impact on their behaviors and the imitative actions is impossible avoided. It is
hard
to educate
teenagers
if there are
many
violent scenes
showed
on most of media channel.

On the other hand
, a report about
bad
news
is
also
helpful to
some
extent.
For example
, when
people
read
news
about violent crime, they
are terrified
and more cautious. The women will not go out to late, parents will pay more attention to their children.
Moreover
, the images of the dead and injured in historic floods
make
the viewers feel unhappy and down mood in the life,
but
it is
also
warns
people
of their responsibilities for the natural and environment.

In conclusion
, I
think
the number of
good
and
bad
news
should be equivalent to encourage audiences to have complete overview of particular issue.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people think that the media should show more stories which report good news. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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