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Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v.2

Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 2
It is fact that modern life is very complex because of the revolution of the technology. For that people have always been striving to equip themselves with the essential skills that would help them to thrive and succeed. Some people believe that young people should not require abilities to be plan and organized. However, as far as The chief reason for that is young people have more abilities than others. I concerned, I believe that youth should have ability to plan and organize in this modern life. Let me shed light on my perspective in the following paragraph. As I mentioned young have more strength physically and mentally. They can grasp complex technology easily. For the young generation it is effortless to live in modern complex world. As matter of the fact world became more complicated for the people who lack these skills. If they learn to plan and organize their schedule they can achieve success in their life without worrying about result. Secondly, youth can achieve many if they organize their plans. As Abraham Lincoln told " if I have 60 minutes to cut down the tree, I will take 40 minutes to sharp the ax and 20 minutes to cut the tree. " Plans are just like sharping ax. Youth should organize to achieve their success soon in life. Another most noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that by gaining the skill of plans and organization, youth can save their time and money too. When they face any difficulties in their life if they have planned about the circumstances then they know the merits and demerits of that situation, also they can solve the problems without being panic in complex situation. Research also show that students who study who stick to their plans for study they do not get stressed in exam get good results in exam compare to students who do not have plans. Let' s put it in to a nut shell, in the modern life youth should learn skills to plan and organize because young people are the future of the world if they will be organized in their life than world will become best organized in all fields.
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people
have always been striving to equip themselves with the essential
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skills
that would
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help
them to thrive and succeed.
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people
believe that
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young
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people
should not require abilities to be
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plan
and organized.
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, as far as The chief reason for
that is
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young
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people
have more abilities than others. I concerned, I believe that
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youth
should have ability to
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plan
and
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organize
in this
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modern
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life
.
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me shed light on my perspective in the following paragraph.

As I mentioned
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young
have more strength
physically
and mentally. They can grasp
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complex
technology
easily
. For the
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young
generation it is effortless to
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live
in
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world
. As matter of the fact
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world
became more complicated for the
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people
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who
lack these
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skills
. If they learn to
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plan
and
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organize
their schedule they can achieve success in their
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life
without worrying about result.

Secondly
,
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youth
can achieve
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many
if they
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organize
their
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plans
. As Abraham Lincoln
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told
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; if I have 60 minutes to
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down the tree, I will take 40 minutes to sharp the ax and 20 minutes to
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cut
the tree.
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;
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are
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like sharping ax.
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should
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organize
to achieve their success
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soon
in life.

Another most noteworthy aspect that should
be mentioned
is that by gaining the
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skill
of
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plans
and organization,
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youth
can save their time and money too. When they face any difficulties in their
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life
if they have planned about the circumstances then they know the merits and demerits of that situation,
also
they can solve the problems without being panic in
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complex
situation. Research
also
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that students
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study
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who
stick to their
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plans
for study they do not
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get
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in exam
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get
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good
results in exam compare to students
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who
do not have plans.

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modern
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life
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youth
should learn
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skills
to
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plan
and
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organize
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because
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young
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people
are the future of the
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world
if they will
be organized
in their
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life
than
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world
will become best organized in all fields.
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55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
365 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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