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Many people think that important things in life are mostly free or can’t be bought. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and examples from your own experience. v.1

Many people think that important things in life are mostly free or can’t be bought. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience. v. 1
Some people think that the things that truly matter in life are free or cannot be bought with money. I completely agree with this view. Money can only buy material comforts. While these are also important in life, in my opinion, they are not the most important things. I have seen many poor people who lead happy and content lives in spite of their poverty. I have also seen many rich people who lead miserable lives in spite of having all the money in the world. If money could buy happiness, the rich must be the happiest in the world. The reality, however, is different. In my opinion, the most important things in life are love and friendship and neither can be bought with money. Parents’ love, for example, is the biggest gift a person receives in their lifetime and it is free. You may be the poorest person in the world but that will not stop your parents from loving you. Relationships with our family and friends are actually the things that keep us going and they are free. Just because you are poor it does not mean that you cannot be in a meaningful relationship. In fact, if you have a nice character and a kind personality, you will have no dearth of friends. By contrast, a rich person with an arrogant personality and a bossy attitude may be lonely in life because no one wants to be with them. To conclude, while it is true that money can buy many things, truly important things in life like love and relationships are actually free and cannot be bought.
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material comforts. While these are
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and friendship and neither can be
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your parents from loving you.

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To conclude
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people think that important things in life are mostly free or can’t be bought. Give your opinion and examples from your own experience. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
270 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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