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Many people think that the most important things in life are free-they cannot be bought. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many people think that the most important things in life are free-they cannot be bought. v. 2
There are things which money can buy and there are things which cannot be bought with money and which are crucial things for a human being to survive in peace and calm nature and yes, of course, they are absolutely free. I completely agree with the statement because I believe that happiness and satisfaction are the things a person cannot buy with his owned wealth. this essay agrees with the statement and outlines the relative points. To begin with, every individual thinks that money will afford anything on earth possibly, this happens and occurs only to a threshold. Money has its own limitations which humans cannot anticipate. A person who farms his land always looks cool, satisfied and happy, because, it is not his wealth making him happy it is his satisfaction with a job which he pursues. But, on the other hand, a wealthy person always struggles to move freely even with his close to heart people around in public area, where he feels insecure, such person has threats which are unforeseen. For instance, if a person dies money cannot fill his or her position and make the emotions calm. In the same way, money would bring attitude and fills a person with an ego which makes a person bad in society and culture. Similarly, as mentioned above those things which are cannot be bought with money such as happiness and self-satisfaction, other things which are crucial are love, kindness, and sense of humor. Being friendly with others makes us a good person, again which is a thing which money cannot make despite it makes an individual rude and characterless. For example, the owner of the kfc world' s famous fast-food chain owner had a very bad experience with his customers when he accidentally disturbed someone eating and didn' t even apologize to them for doing so, they sued him for 14 thousand dollars due to his misbehavior. To conclude, of course, money does matter when it comes to wealth and self-control and balance among individuals, but only money cannot make anything. The happiest person is the wealthier person no matter what place it is around the world.
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and there are things which cannot be
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and which are crucial things for a human being to survive in peace and calm nature and yes,
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I believe that happiness and satisfaction are the things a
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with the statement and outlines the relative points.

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with, every individual
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that
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money
will afford anything on earth
possibly
, this happens and occurs
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only
to a threshold.
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has its
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own
limitations which humans cannot anticipate. A
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person
who farms his land always looks cool, satisfied and happy,
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because
, it is not his wealth making him happy it is his satisfaction with a job which he pursues.
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,
on the other hand
, a wealthy
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always struggles to
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freely
even with his close to heart
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people
around in public area, where he feels insecure, such
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person
has threats which are unforeseen.
For instance
, if a
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person
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dies
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money
cannot fill
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his or her
position and
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the emotions calm.
In the same way
,
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money
would bring attitude and fills a
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person
with an ego which
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a
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bad
in society and culture.

Similarly
, as mentioned above those things which are cannot be
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such as happiness and self-satisfaction, other things which are crucial are
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love
, kindness, and sense of humor. Being friendly with others
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makes
us a
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good
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person
, again which is a thing which
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money
cannot
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despite it
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an individual rude and characterless.
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, the owner of the
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experience with his customers when he
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, they sued him for 14 thousand dollars due to his misbehavior.

To conclude
,
of course
,
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does matter when it
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comes
to wealth and self-control and balance among individuals,
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but
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only
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money
cannot
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anything. The happiest
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person
is the wealthier
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person
no matter what place it is around the world.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people think that the most important things in life are free-they cannot be bought. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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