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Many people think that countries should import less food and produce more for their population. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many people think that countries should import less food and produce more for their population. v. 2
There is a school of thought that maximizing domestic food production to meet the population’s demand is what a country should prioritize, and the restriction of exotic food consumption is necessary. I do not totally agree with this opinion. When it comes to local food business, I strongly support promoting these activities for two compelling reasons. From nutritional perspective, meats, fruits or vegetables which are produced within consumers’ proximity are generally more beneficial to their health with larger diversity and higher quality of nutrients. This is due to the fact that they are normally fresh and do not experience lengthy transporting and preserving period in comparison with similar products imported from oversea regions. From economic stand point, this enhancement means the encouragement to a nation’s agricultural and food exchange practices. The result would be economic development in many areas, especially in rural and mountainous ones. However, my agreement does not cover the limitation of importing food from other nations. Individuals would certainly be the beneficiary of the increasing food diversity as they could get access to a wider range of tastes if the availability of food products from different countries is not restricted. Japan clearly typifies the case. Despite having arguably global reputation of similar dishes, its citizens really enjoy many types of seafood from different countries like Vietnamese shrimps or Brazilian salmon. In addition, nations should open their market to outside food producers if they demand equal chances to export their agricultural products in the age of globalization. This would be attributed to their overall economic progress and be the solution for a potential scenario of having food production outweighing consumption domestically. In conclusion, my opinion is not against importing food but for reinvigorating the local supply without making any negative effects on the distribution of foreign food products to benefit both individuals as well as the economy.
There is a school of
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thought
that maximizing domestic
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food
production to
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meet
the population’s demand is what a country should prioritize, and the restriction of exotic
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food
consumption is necessary. I do not
totally
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agree
with this opinion.

When it
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comes
to local
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food
business, I
strongly
support promoting these activities for two compelling reasons. From nutritional perspective, meats, fruits or vegetables which
are produced
within consumers’ proximity are
generally
more beneficial to their health with larger diversity and higher quality of nutrients.
This is due to the fact that
they are
normally
fresh and do not experience lengthy transporting and preserving period
in comparison
with similar
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products
imported from oversea regions. From economic stand point, this enhancement means the encouragement to a nation’s agricultural and
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food
exchange practices. The result would be economic development in
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many
areas,
especially
in rural and mountainous ones.

However
, my agreement does not cover the limitation of importing
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food
from other nations. Individuals would
certainly
be the beneficiary of the increasing
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food
diversity as they could
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get
access to a wider range of tastes if the availability of
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food
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products
from
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different
countries is not restricted. Japan
clearly
typifies the case. Despite having
arguably
global reputation of similar dishes, its citizens
really
enjoy
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many
types of seafood from
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different
countries like Vietnamese shrimps or Brazilian salmon.
In addition
, nations should open their market to outside
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food
producers if they demand equal chances to export their agricultural
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products
in the age of globalization. This would
be attributed
to their
overall
economic progress and be the solution for a potential scenario of having
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food
production outweighing consumption
domestically
.

In conclusion
, my opinion is not against importing
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food
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but
for reinvigorating the local supply without making any
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negative
effects on the distribution of foreign
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food
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products
to benefit both individuals
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as well as
the economy.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people think that countries should import less food and produce more for their population. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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