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Many people think that companies or private institutions should take the responsibility of cleaning the waste in the environment, not the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many people think that companies or private institutions should take the responsibility of cleaning the waste in the environment, not the government. v. 2
Given the high volume of garbage produced by the private industries, many people argue that these industries should take the responsibility of cleaning the waste. However, I believe that the full control should be in the hand of the government, with some assistance from the private institutions. Companies, especially manufacturing industries, produce tons of waste every day around the world. Comparing to the household waste, this waste is massive and pollutes the environment significantly, especially in the third-world countries where environmental awareness is very low. So, many people want the private industries to take the responsibility of cleaning the waste as they are responsible for most of the pollution. However, there will be some problem if the responsibility is completely shifted to the companies. Firstly, companies might not give high importance to this issue and will not spend enough money on this task as profitability is their main goal. So, we will not get the desired result. Secondly, there will be some kind of disagreement as to the proportion of the cost spent by each company because not all companies produce the equal amount of garbage. These all issues will result in mismanagement. Government can handle the task effectively and efficiently as they have administrative power and can work strictly and neutrally for the betterment of the whole country. Rather than shifting the full burden to the private companies, high amount of tax and fine should be imposed on the companies which produce a large volume of garbage. In this way, government can cover the cost of cleaning the pollution. In conclusion, private industries can take responsibility for cleaning the waste in the form of giving the high amount of tax. But the main control should be in the hand of the government for better, effective and neutral management.
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Given
the
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high
volume of garbage produced by the
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private
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industries
,
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many
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people
argue that these
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industries
should take the
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responsibility
of
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cleaning
the
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waste
.
However
, I believe that the full control should be in the hand of the
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government
, with
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some
assistance from the
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private
institutions.

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Companies
,
especially
manufacturing
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industries
, produce tons of
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waste
every day around the world. Comparing to the household
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waste
, this
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waste
is massive and pollutes the environment
significantly
,
especially
in the third-world countries where environmental awareness is
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very
low.
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So
,
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many
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people
want the
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private
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industries
to take the
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responsibility
of
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cleaning
the
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waste
as they are responsible for most of the pollution.

However
, there will be
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some
problem if the
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responsibility
is completely shifted to the
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companies
.
Firstly
,
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companies
might not give
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high
importance to this issue and will not spend
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enough
money on this task as profitability is their main goal.
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So
, we will not
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get
the desired result.
Secondly
, there will be
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some
kind of disagreement as to the proportion of the cost spent by each
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company
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because
not all
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companies
produce the equal amount of garbage. These all issues will result in mismanagement.

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Government
can handle the task
effectively
and
efficiently
as they have administrative power and can work
strictly
and
neutrally
for the betterment of the whole country.
Rather
than shifting the full burden to the
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private
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
,
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high
amount of tax and fine should
be imposed
on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
which produce a large volume of garbage. In this way,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can cover the cost of
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cleaning
the pollution.

In conclusion
,
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private
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industries
can take
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responsibility
for
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cleaning
the
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waste
in the form of giving the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
high
amount of tax.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
the main control should be in the hand of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
for better, effective and neutral management.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people think that companies or private institutions should take the responsibility of cleaning the waste in the environment, not the government. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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