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Many people think it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why is it so and what can be done about it? v.3

Many people think it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why is it so and what can be done about it? v. 3
It is irrefutable that environmental damage is occurring at a very fast pace and people know that it is a global priority today to save the environment. However, when it comes to doing something, no one steps forward. In this essay I intend to delve into the causes of this phenomenon and suggest simple measures, which can be taken at the individual level. To begin with, there are many reasons behind the indifferent attitude of people towards the environment. The main reason is that people don’t know that they themselves are the main cause of environmental damage. It is a simple truth that global warming is the result of billions of reasons. To illustrate, people are cutting down trees for their needs, using too many luxuries in the home, driving too many cars and are wasting resources like fresh water. If only awareness is brought about these things, then many people would take a step forward in this direction. Moreover, people are also not doing anything because they think that it is a global problem and only government action can solve it. What has to be made clear is that small measures taken at the individual level will take mammoth dimensions when mounted up. For example, in a country like India with a population of more than one billion, if each person plants a tree and nurtures it for the first few months, the result would be unimaginable. People can take simple steps like recycling things such as newspapers, plastics and glass. People should also walk for short distances instead of using personal vehicles and for long distances public transport should be preferred. Another reason why people do little about the environment is that people have become very busy in their pursuit of wealth and fame that they have no time to think about the environment. What they don’t realize that if nothing is done today, it might be too late tomorrow. The rate at which global warming is occurring would soon transform the Earth into a boiling pot and it would be uninhabitable one day. Summing up, the onus of saving the environment is not just on the governments and big industries. Each and every individual must come forward and do his/her bit to save the environment before it is too late. It has rightly been said – “little drops of water, little grains of sand, make the mighty ocean and the vast land”
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priority
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today
to save the
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environment
.
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to doing something, no one steps forward. In this essay I intend to delve into the causes of this phenomenon and suggest simple measures, which can
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at the individual level.

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with, there are
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reasons
behind the indifferent attitude of
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people
towards the
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environment
. The main
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reason
is that
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people
don’t know that they themselves are the main cause of environmental damage. It is a simple truth that
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global
warming is the result of billions of
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reasons
. To illustrate,
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people
are cutting down trees for their needs, using too
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many
luxuries in the home, driving too
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many
cars and are wasting resources like fresh water. If
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only
awareness
is brought
about these things, then
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many
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people
would take a step forward in this direction.

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,
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are
also
not doing anything
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they
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problem and
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government
action can solve it. What
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be made
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is that
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measures taken at the individual level will take mammoth dimensions when mounted up.
For example
, in a country like India with a population of more than one billion, if each person plants a tree and nurtures it for the
first
few months, the result would be unimaginable.
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People
can take simple steps like recycling things such as newspapers, plastics and glass.
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People
should
also
walk for short distances
instead
of using personal vehicles and for long distances public transport should
be preferred
.

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why
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about the
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have become
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busy in their pursuit of wealth and fame that they have no time to
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think
about the
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environment
. What they don’t realize that if nothing
is done
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today
, it might be too late tomorrow. The rate at which
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global
warming is occurring would
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soon
transform the Earth into a boiling pot and it would be uninhabitable one day.

Summing up, the onus of saving the
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environment
is not
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just
on the
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governments
and
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big
industries. Each and every individual
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must
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forward and do his/her bit to save the
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environment
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before
it is too late. It has
rightly
been said
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drops of water,
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grains of sand,
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the mighty ocean and the vast land
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IELTS essay Many people think it is important to protect the environment, but they make no effort on it themselves. Why is it so and what can be done about it? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
404 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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