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Many people these days have computer, laptops, telephone at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? v.1

Many people these days have computer, laptops, telephone at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? v. 1
With the availability of electronic devices, such as computers, laptops and telephones, at home, it is being debated whether bringing work there is a good option or not. In my opinion, working from home can prove to be a disadvantage to one's proffessional career. However, under certain cases, working from home can also be beneficial. On the one hand, working from home distances oneself from the workplace, which, in turn, would affect the dedication with which the individual completes his work. There are just too many distractions, such as visiting guests or neighbourhood noises, at home that could affect the individual's working efficiency. Also, working in a workplace creates a bonding with the fellow colleagues which, quite frankly, is not possible when one is working from their home. If we are to consider health as a factor, staying at home does not exactly stimulate body movements the way working at a workplace does. In the long run, the individual starts feeling disconnected from the institute, which consequently, affects their motivation to deliver an efficient result. On the other hand, working from home could be a life-saver for those who could not travel to workplace everyday due to a physical disability or are just away on a journey. With devices like computers and laptops at hand, these individuals could stay in touch with the organisation even though they may not be present there. In conclusion, I believe going to workplace has a profound effect on an individuals long-term career and working from home should only be considered when there a disability preventing them from being physically present at their organisation.
With the availability of electronic devices, such as computers, laptops and telephones, at home, it is
being debated
whether bringing work there is a
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good
option or not. In my opinion,
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working
from home can prove to be a disadvantage to one's
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proffessional
career.
However
, under certain cases,
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working
from home can
also
be beneficial.

On the one hand,
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working
from home distances oneself from the
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workplace
, which, in turn, would affect the dedication with which the
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individual
completes his work. There are
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just
too
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many
distractions, such as visiting guests or
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neighbourhood
noises, at home that could affect the individual's
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working
efficiency.
Also
,
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working
in a
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workplace
creates a bonding with the
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fellow colleagues
which, quite
frankly
, is not possible when one is
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working
from their home. If we are to consider health as a factor, staying at home does not exactly stimulate body movements the way
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working
at a
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workplace
does. In the long run, the
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individual
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starts
feeling disconnected from the institute, which
consequently
, affects their motivation to deliver an efficient result.

On the other hand
,
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working
from home could be a life-saver for those who could not travel to
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workplace
everyday due to a physical disability or are
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just
away on a journey. With devices like computers and laptops at hand, these
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individuals
could stay in touch with the
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organisation
even though
they may not be present there.

In conclusion
, I believe going to
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workplace
has a profound effect on an
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individuals
long-term career and
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working
from home should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be considered
when there a disability preventing them from being
physically
present at their
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organisation
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people these days have computer, laptops, telephone at their home for work. Do you think, working from home has more advantages or disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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