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Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is not appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.9

Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is not appropriate to use animals for such experiments. v. 9
In the modern world, many animals are used for scientific purposes, especially rats, rabbits and monkeys are popular among the researchers, as their organism is similar to the human body. In this regard, many people are willing to prohibit such kinds of experiments, as it can damage the animal bio-diversity, leading to become extinct. However, others feel that in order to develop medicines and prevent new illnesses, such kinds of experiments can be beneficial for the patients. Personally, I believe that animals specious should not be damaged by the trails-trips of the people, especially endangered species. In the one hand, it is true that animal bio-diversity can be affected by the experiments. In this regard, many individuals are keen to think that people has not a right to use them for researches. Furthermore, these species are not survived after the trail-trips, as many experiments are sticking. To illustrate, scientists observed the monkeys internal organs in order to find a new painkiller for patients, and these trails-trips leaded to extinction of monkeys. However, thanks to these scientists, many patients are saved. In the other hand, these experiments may save the people from dangerous illnesses such as malaria, and lead to the development of medical facilities. In this case, some people believe that animals can be used for scientific purposes. Moreover, thanks to researchers, many peoples would be able to find a cure, if the environmental activists stop the protecting. For instance, millions of people are saved by these experiments. In addition to this, in the future, the sanitation also will be improved. In conclusion, although many people believe that these activities is illegal, and dangerous for many species, some people tend to think that these activities can save the life of millions of people around the world. However, personally, in my opinion, animals should not be used for scientific purposes.
In the modern world,
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many
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animals
are
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used
for scientific purposes,
especially
rats, rabbits and monkeys are popular among the researchers, as their organism is similar to the human body. In this regard,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are willing to prohibit such kinds of
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experiments
, as it can damage the
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animal
bio-diversity, leading to become extinct.
However
, others feel that in order to develop medicines and
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prevent
new illnesses, such kinds of
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experiments
can be beneficial for the patients.
Personally
, I believe that
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animals
specious should not
be damaged
by the trails-trips of the
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people
,
especially
endangered species.

In the one hand, it is true that
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animal
bio-diversity can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by the
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experiments
. In this regard,
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many
individuals are keen to
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think
that
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people
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has
not a right to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them for researches.
Furthermore
, these species are not survived after the trail-trips, as
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many
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experiments
are sticking. To illustrate, scientists observed the monkeys internal organs in order to find a new painkiller for patients, and these trails-trips leaded to extinction of monkeys.
However
, thanks to these scientists,
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many
patients
are saved
.

In the other hand, these
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experiments
may save the
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people
from
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dangerous
illnesses such as malaria, and lead to the development of medical facilities.
In this case
,
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some
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people
believe that
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animals
can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for scientific purposes.
Moreover
, thanks to researchers,
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many
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peoples
would be able to find a cure, if the environmental activists
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stop
the protecting.
For instance
, millions of
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people
are saved
by these
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experiments
.
In addition
to this, in the future, the sanitation
also
will be
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improved
.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
believe that these activities is illegal, and
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dangerous
for
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many
species,
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some
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people
tend to
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think
that these activities can save the life of millions of
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people
around the world.
However
,
personally
, in my opinion,
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animals
should not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for scientific purposes.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is not appropriate to use animals for such experiments. v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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