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Describe a lesson that you enjoyed You should say: When it was What it was about What happened And explain why you liked it. v.1

Describe a lesson that you enjoyed You should say: When it was What it was about What happened And explain why you liked it. v. 1
I would like to talk about a lesson in English that I enjoyed when I was still in high school. I have to admit that I was weak in English, so I determined to improve this subject by attending some English classes. My aunt, who is an online English tutor, guided me to catch up with the rest of my classmates. We mainly communicated by means of an online video calls and she gave me instructions and studying materials via email. At first, I had doubts about the new teaching method and wondered whether it was effective. But the lesson went amazingly well by her meticulous instructing. I learned many topics, but the topic “Politic”, which make me exhaust because I did not have any interest in such matters. I had to learn many new words for this topic and then we went on to revise grammar structures such as Inversion, articles which are also a tricky grammatical point. She had tailored teaching style to suit my ability so that I can master the content of the lesson. Knowing that I would get bored easily, she combined a lot of visual aids and discussion in her lecture to keep my attention. At the end of the task, she gave me a short quiz so that I could have a good grasps what I had just learned. The most fascinated thing in my online task was level of interactive learning. Although many people believe that studying online hinders the interaction between teachers and learners, I think that such attitude is behind the times. I was always relaxed and participated more actively in discussion with my teachers. Moreover, online learning does not only save time and cost, but also brings to surpass face-to-face-learning in efficiency.
I would like to talk about a lesson in English that I enjoyed when I was
still
in high school. I
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have to
admit that I was weak in English,
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so
I determined to
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improve
this subject by attending
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some
English classes. My aunt, who is an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
English tutor, guided me to catch up with the rest of my classmates. We
mainly
communicated by means of an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
video
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
calls and
she gave me instructions and studying materials via email. At
first
, I had doubts about the new teaching method and wondered whether it was effective.
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But
the lesson went
amazingly
well by her meticulous instructing.

I learned
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many
topics,
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but
the topic “Politic”, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me exhaust
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because
I did not have any interest in such matters. I had to learn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
new words for this
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
topic and
then we went on to revise grammar structures such as Inversion, articles which are
also
a tricky grammatical point. She had tailored teaching style to suit my ability
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I can master the content of the lesson. Knowing that I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
bored
easily
, she combined
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
visual aids and discussion in her lecture to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
my attention. At the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the task, she gave me a short quiz
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so
that I could have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
grasps what I had
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just
learned.

The most fascinated thing in my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
task was level of interactive learning. Although
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that studying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
hinders the interaction between teachers and learners, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that such attitude is behind the times. I was always relaxed and participated more
actively
in discussion with my teachers.
Moreover
,
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online
learning does not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
save time and cost,
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but
also
brings to surpass face-to-face-learning in efficiency.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe a lesson that you enjoyed You should say: When it was What it was about What happened And explain why you liked it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
293 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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