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Many people want to have a successful career and a happy family life both. What problems are involved in combining a career and family life? How to overcome such a problem?

Many people strive to maintain a successful career and happy family life at the same time. What problems can this situation create? What are the possible solutions? v. 5
A big section of society has a desire to have great balance between professional life and professional life but it is not easy as much we think. To make a victory profession and happy family life together people have to face many troubles in other words it is inherited with these things. We can manage that both things together if we adopt some solution. This essay will explain both difficulties and answer how to solve this worry. To begin with, there are many problem associated with personal and professional life. Very hardworking people give hundred percent in work life to fulfil their family expectation, but it is increasing day by day. What is more, they become totally workaholic and cannot give sufficient time to family member. For example, my teacher is working mother. She have to spent time with his children and life partner because of solid hectic schedule she cannot manage work and all things together so it become more difficult for her. Therefore, it is very complicated to manage both together and it my significantly affect negative side. Moreover, in order to solve this type of situation time management is great solution for it. We have to implement top-notch time management in our daily life according to priority. That who cannot manage working and non working life together is just because of poor time management. For instance, corporate class should tune off their working switch when they reach at home and just enjoy time with children or spent time on fitness. Hence, time management is one of the best weapons to tackle this trouble. To conclude, maximum people has dream to have perfect balance life with great business and lovely family but to archive this dream they cannot give enough time to their closes people and become stressful. To handle this situation time management technique is very beneficial for them to overcome such a problem.
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life
and professional
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life
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but
it is not easy as much we
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think
. To
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make
a victory profession and happy
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family
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life
together
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people
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have to
face
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troubles
in other words
it
is inherited
with these things. We can
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manage
that both things together if we adopt
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some
solution. This essay will
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explain
both difficulties and answer how to solve this worry.

To
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begin
with, there are
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many problem
associated with personal and professional
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life
.
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Very
hardworking
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people
give
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hundred
percent in work
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life
to fulfil their
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family
expectation,
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but
it is increasing day by day.
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, they become
totally
workaholic and cannot give sufficient
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time
to
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family
member.
For example
, my teacher is
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working
mother. She
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have
to spent
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time
with his children and
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life
partner
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because
of solid hectic schedule she cannot
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manage
work and all things together
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so
it
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become
more difficult for her.
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, it is
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complicated to
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manage
both together and it my
significantly
affect
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negative
side.

Moreover
, in order to solve this type of situation
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time
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management
is great solution for it. We
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have to
implement top-notch
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time
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management
in our daily
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life
according to priority. That who cannot
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manage
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working
and non
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working
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life
together is
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just
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because
of poor
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time
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management
.
For instance
, corporate
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class
should tune off their
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working
switch when they reach at home and
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just
enjoy
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time
with children or spent
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time
on fitness.
Hence
,
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time
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management
is one of the best weapons to tackle this trouble.

To conclude
, maximum
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people
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has
dream to have perfect balance
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life
with great business and lovely
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family
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but
to archive this dream they cannot give
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enough
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time
to their closes
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people
and become stressful. To handle this situation
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time
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management
technique is
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very
beneficial for them to overcome such a problem.
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IELTS essay Many people want to have a successful career and a happy family life both. What problems are involved in combining a career and family life? How to overcome such a problem?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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