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To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history? v.3

To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history? v. 3
Some people give little credit and value of studying history as it is petty and in their opinion does not have any importance in the modern society. Other people, on the contrary, reckon that the past has prominent roles in understanding our modern life and taking important decisions for the future. So in this essay, I will consider both points of views and state my own assertion on the matter followed by the consequences if we do not teach history to our children. In the modern world, it cannot be denied that examining the past could be unbelievably valuable in terms of understanding of our modern world problems. There is a saying that suggests that "history repeats itself", for this reason, if we delve into history, examine it without leaving any detail behind, we will have more opportunities to anticipate forthcoming problems and it is undeniable that problems would be solved very easily. Human conflicts, inventions and socials issues in all the ages are quite similar and this is what makes the study of past so important. Without studying the past we cannot understand why a certain civilization flourished among others and why nations were destroyed. This knowledge can give us such a wisdom that would help us progress further. History has a great importance in our lives, in spite of the fact that there are people who think the past is useless and there is no point in studying history. However, it is undoubtedly true that an explicit future awaits the one who has delved into history. Thus teaching history to the children needs to be considered comprehensively. Because if children are not taught history, there will be consequences. For instance, lack of knowledge of the past of their country would have a tragic outcome in the society. To conclude, studying and examining the past has a fundamental value in the modern world and it is undeniable that the effects of the children who are not taught history would be more catastrophic than anyone could imagine.
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credit and value of
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history
as it is petty and in their opinion does not have any importance in the
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modern
society. Other
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,
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has prominent roles in understanding our
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life and taking
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important
decisions for the future.
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in this essay, I will consider both points of views and state my
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own
assertion on the matter followed by the consequences if we do not teach
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history
to our children.

In the
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modern
world, it cannot
be denied
that examining the
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past
could be
unbelievably
valuable in terms of understanding of our
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modern
world problems. There is a saying that suggests that
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history repeats itself
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for this reason
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, examine it without leaving any detail behind, we will have more opportunities to anticipate forthcoming problems and it is undeniable that problems would
be solved
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very
easily
. Human conflicts, inventions and socials issues in all the ages are quite similar and this is what
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we cannot understand why a certain civilization flourished among others and why nations were
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is useless and there is no point in
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history
.
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, it is
undoubtedly
true that an explicit future awaits the one who has delved into
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.
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teaching
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history
to the children needs to
be considered
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.
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if children are not taught
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, there will be consequences.
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of their country would have a tragic outcome in the society.

To conclude
,
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and examining the
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has a fundamental value in the
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modern
world and it is undeniable that the effects of the children who are not taught
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history
would be more catastrophic than anyone could imagine.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is important to learn the past? What will be the effect if children are not taught history? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
337 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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