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Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is it positive or negative? v.1

Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is it positive or negative? v. 1
There are people who enjoy spending money. They simply cannot resist the urge to splurge. There are also people who believe in saving every penny they earn. In my opinion, neither approach is correct. It is impossible to get something for nothing. We have to earn money to live comfortably. There are certain expenses that cannot be done away with. For example, we all need food to eat and clothes to wear. We also have a responsibility to take care of our dependent children, parents and spouse. All of these are good reasons to spend money. However, I am against spending money just for the sake of it. There are people who spend every penny they earn. They buy things without even bothering to check whether they actually need them. While spending might give them some momentary pleasures, they will soon find themselves in deep financial problems. There is no harm in enjoying life by going on a holiday or buying latest fashion clothes or accessories. However, one must ensure that one is not spending more than one can afford. Also, emergencies may arise any time. For example, one can fall ill or lose job. It is impossible to tide over such crises without adequate savings. Just like some people enjoy spending, there are also some people who enjoy saving. In their relentless quest to save as much as they can, they deprive themselves of the little pleasures in life. These people may have huge bank balances but they fail to enjoy life. Life is short and no one can carry their savings with them to the other world. It is therefore pointless to save all the money one earns without enjoying the little pleasures of the world. Happiness, after all, is the biggest wealth. To conclude, the very purpose of earning money is to lead a comfortable life. This requires one to save and spend in the right amounts.
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enjoy
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spending
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money
. They
simply
cannot resist the urge to splurge. There are
also
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people
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who
believe in saving every penny they
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earn
. In my opinion, neither approach is correct.

It is impossible to
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get
something for nothing. We
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have to
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earn
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money
to
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live
comfortably
. There are certain expenses that cannot
be done
away with.
For example
, we all need food to eat and clothes to wear. We
also
have a responsibility to take care of our dependent children, parents and spouse. All of these are
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good
reasons to spend money.

However
, I am against
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spending
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money
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just
for the sake of it. There are
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people
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who
spend every penny they
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earn
. They
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buy
things without even bothering to
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check
whether they actually need them. While
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spending
might give them
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some
momentary pleasures, they will
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soon
find themselves in deep financial problems. There is no harm in enjoying
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life
by going on a holiday or buying
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latest
fashion clothes or accessories.
However
, one
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must
ensure that one is not
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spending
more than one can afford.
Also
, emergencies may arise any time.
For example
, one can fall ill or lose job. It is impossible to tide over such crises without adequate savings.

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like
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some
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, there are
also
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some
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people
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enjoy
saving. In their relentless quest to save as much as they can, they deprive themselves of the
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little
pleasures in
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life
. These
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people
may have huge bank balances
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but
they fail to
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enjoy
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life
.
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Life
is short and no one can carry their savings with them to the other world. It is
therefore
pointless to save all the
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money
one
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earns
without enjoying the
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little
pleasures of the world. Happiness,
after all
, is the biggest wealth.

To conclude
, the
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very
purpose of earning
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money
is to lead a comfortable
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life
. This requires one to save and spend in the right amounts.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is it positive or negative? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
320 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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