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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? Give reasons for your answer and include and relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.8

Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 8
Nowadays, people’s appearance is crucial, people always judge everyone from their clothes and accessories. Many people fond of fashionable clothes because this reason. In my views, this is a good thing and it gives a lot of benefits for people who wear designed clothes. The first reason is people who wear fashionable clothes seem to be more professional than who do not wear because they know the situation that they need to do or the place that they need to go. In addition, they know how to dress in the correct way of each situation. For example, fashionable human always looks professional when they work or have a meeting. Furthermore, they wear a casual fashionable dress during their holiday. In addition, we can assume that fashionable people always make themselves look good. The second reason is fashionable clothes are more attractive for everyone who has first meet you. It makes you more charming and impress everyone during the first time. Particularly, your customers and your partnerships. For instance, your customers have more reliable and believe you to involve with their further projects together because of your character and appearance. Another example, has occurred to me, due to my work is using professional look, if I dress fashionably, it seems to me than most of the clients always believe me when I recommend them. In conclusion, I believe that fashionable style is more beneficial than a drawback. However, it depends on your style, you need to select the designed clothes which are more suitable for you.
Nowadays,
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people’s
appearance is crucial,
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people
always judge everyone from their
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clothes
and accessories.
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people
fond of
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fashionable
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clothes
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because
this reason. In my views, this is a
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good
thing and it gives
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a lot of
benefits for
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people
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who
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wear
designed clothes.

The
first
reason is
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people
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who
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wear
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fashionable
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clothes
seem to be more professional than
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who
do not
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wear
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because
they know the situation that they need to do or the place that they need to go.
In addition
, they know how to dress in the correct way of each situation.
For example
,
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fashionable
human always looks professional when they work or have a meeting.
Furthermore
, they
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wear
a casual
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fashionable
dress during their holiday.
In addition
, we can assume that
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fashionable
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people
always
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make
themselves look
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good
.

The second reason is
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fashionable
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clothes
are more attractive for everyone
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who
has
first
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meet
you. It
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makes
you more charming and impress everyone during the
first
time.
Particularly
, your customers and your partnerships.
For instance
, your customers have more reliable and believe you to involve with their
further
projects together
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because
of your character and appearance. Another example, has occurred to me, due to my work is using professional look, if I dress
fashionably
, it seems to me than most of the clients always believe me when I recommend them.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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fashionable
style is more beneficial than a drawback.
However
, it depends on your style, you need to select the designed
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
clothes
which are more suitable for you.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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