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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v.7

Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 7
Trendy clothing is a preference for a lot of people. This is due to a couple of reasons like expensive marketing drives by high-street brands as well as consumers looking for a change in their styles. This essay will look at the above mentioned reasons in detail and weigh if following fashion is good or bad. An industry of fashion brands exists in today's time, which is constantly releasing new styles on the market. To sell these styles, these companies spend heavily on marketing in the pursuit of making their latest collection a trend for that season. They use various marketing channels like electronic, print, billboards and celebrity endorsements. As an example, recently a product names 'Cute Neon Bag' from a brand got hugely popular and became a trend. When a recent article sought out reasons behind this, it was revealed that the bag was copyrighted by one of the big retailers who was marketing it heavily, thus turning it into a trend. Although in many cases there is concerted effort behind the mainstreaming of a trend, sometimes people follow fashion because they are looking for a change in their wardrobes. This may be induced by changing of seasons, politics or the arrival of the holiday season. For instance, a research stated that in the spring season, people have a tendency to wear bright clothing. The same research quoted a person saying 'I like to wear bright colours as this reflects my mood and the mood of this beautiful city around me'. Therefore, the reason for wearing trendy clothing is people looking for a change. In conclusion, dressing up in the latest fashion clothing is a good thing. This is because it supports the clothing industry of the country and also adds change in the lives of consumers. Hence, there is no reason why users should not wear the latest style if it is what they prefer to dress up in.
Trendy clothing is a preference for
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a lot of
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people
. This is due to a couple of
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reasons
like expensive
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marketing
drives by high-street brands
as well
as consumers looking for a
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change
in their
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styles
. This essay will look at the above mentioned
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reasons
in detail and weigh if following
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fashion
is
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good
or
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bad
.

An industry of
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fashion
brands exists in
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today
's time, which is
constantly
releasing new
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styles
on the market. To sell these
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styles
, these
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companies
spend
heavily
on
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marketing
in the pursuit of making their latest collection a trend for that
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season
. They
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use
various
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marketing
channels like electronic, print, billboards and celebrity endorsements. As an example, recently a product names 'Cute Neon Bag' from a brand
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got
hugely
popular and became a trend. When a recent article sought out
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reasons
behind this, it
was revealed
that the bag
was copyrighted
by one of the
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big
retailers who was
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marketing
it
heavily
,
thus
turning it into a trend.

Although in
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many
cases there
is concerted
effort behind the mainstreaming of a trend,
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sometimes
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people
follow
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fashion
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because
they are looking for a
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change
in their wardrobes. This may
be induced
by changing of
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seasons
, politics or the arrival of the holiday
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season
.
For instance
,
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a research
stated that in the spring
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season
,
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people
have a tendency to wear bright clothing. The same research quoted a person saying 'I like to wear bright
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colours
as this reflects my mood and the mood of this
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beautiful
city around me'.
Therefore
, the
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reason
for wearing trendy clothing is
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people
looking for a
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change
.

In conclusion
, dressing up in the latest
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fashion
clothing is a
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good
thing. This is
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because
it supports the clothing industry of the country and
also
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adds
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change
in the
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lives
of consumers.
Hence
, there is no
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reason
why users should not wear the latest
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style
if it is what they prefer to dress up in.
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IELTS essay Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
321 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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