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Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v.5

Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 5
Clothes are the basic need of any human, but fashionable clothes is the need of the contemporary world. The appearance of the man defines his personality. People generally judge others by their outfits. There are many people who wear fashionable clothes as they always want to follow the current trends. Some people believe that our clothes decide whether we are old fashioned or go with the trend. Whereas, others think that it is not appreciable to spend a lot of cash in buying fashionable clothes. This essay delves upon both the views. On the one hand, in the modern world, wearing trendy clothes is essential to maintain the standards and image among the people. This type of behaviour, not only boost the confidence, but also encourages the people to think about their health and wealth. As we all know, first impression is the last impression. So, people always try to be more fashionable in order to look different and stylish. For instance, millions of people in India adore Priyanka Chopra and follow her clothing styles. On the other hand, some people think that it's not appreciably to spend a lot of money in fashionable clothes. Such people believe that money should be spent on the basic needs of the society and not on the fashionable clothes. For example, Mahatma Gandhi, father of the nation, used to wear simple cotton clothes but still brought magnificent changes in the society. Not only money people also squander their time in markets for clothes shopping. In my opinion, it is the personal choice of an individual to decide what they have to wear. We need to maintain a balance among both the views.
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are the basic
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need
of any human,
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fashionable
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clothes
is the
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need
of the contemporary world. The appearance of the
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man
defines his personality.
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generally
judge others by their outfits. There are
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many
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people
who wear
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fashionable
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clothes
as they always want to follow the
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current
trends.
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Some
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people
believe that our
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clothes
decide whether we are
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old fashioned
or
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go with
the trend.
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, others
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think
that it is not appreciable to spend
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a lot of
cash in buying
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fashionable
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clothes
. This essay delves upon both the views.

On the one hand, in the modern world, wearing trendy
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clothes
is essential to maintain the standards and image among the
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people
. This type of
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behaviour
, not
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only
boost the confidence,
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also
encourages the
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people
to
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think
about their health and wealth. As we all know,
first
impression is the last impression.
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So
,
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people
always try to be more
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fashionable
in order to look
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different
and stylish.
For instance
, millions of
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people
in India adore Priyanka Chopra and follow her clothing styles.

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,
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some
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people
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think
that it's not
appreciably
to spend
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a lot of
money in
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fashionable
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clothes
. Such
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people
believe that money should
be spent
on the basic
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needs
of the society and not on the
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fashionable
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clothes
.
For example
, Mahatma Gandhi, father of the nation,
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used
to wear simple cotton
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clothes
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but
still
brought magnificent
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changes
in the society. Not
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only
money
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people
also
squander their time in markets for
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clothes
shopping.

In my opinion, it is the personal choice of an individual to decide what they
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have to
wear. We
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need
to maintain a balance among both the views.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people like to wear fashionable clothes. Why do you think this is the case? Is this a good thing or a bad thing? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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