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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. v.7

Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. v. 7
Numerous individuals have complexity controlling in good health diets. This essay will discuss some of the major issues about dietary problems and illustrates how we can easily overcome this problem by some simple life changes. Nowadays people tend to freeze food that won't be sufficient for good health. It can be seen, numerous reasons can be issued for having junk food such as birthdays, gossiping with friends, corporate meetings, and so on. Everyone depended on junk food day by day. Number of fast food restaurants have rapidly risen over the past 7 years. The restaurants are offering various types of junk food, caloric food such as sugar, drink, Chinese food, and so on. There are several good reasons that can compel one to go in favour of the statement. According to the research statistics, people all over the universe tend to have fast food even when they meet with several problems such as dietary problems. Another reason can be found for dietary problems such as smoking, and so on. These types of habits can be issues that people cannot control healthy lifestyle. Research shows that, people who have dietary the percentage is increasing nowadays. In addition to these, there are differences between rural areas and urban areas. The people who lived in the rural areas suffer from many types of even simple diseases only because of their inability to benefit from these health-related published materials as they lack the ability to read. However, the situation is opposite those who lived in the urban areas. This problem can be solved by changing some lifestyle rules. Firstly, think about food that has a lot of calories, sugar and fat and it should be avoided. Secondly, smoking provides a basis for an unhealthy life so that these types of drugs should be avoided. Finally, people should have watched tv series or newspaper because several types of problems and solutions can be found from which. In conclusion, I strongly believe that junk food, even drugs can be the cause of dietary problems. Therefore the government should enhance consciousness about healthy life.
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good
health diets. This essay will discuss
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some of the
major issues about dietary
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problems
and illustrates how we can
easily
overcome this
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problem
by
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some
simple life
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changes
.

Nowadays
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people
tend to freeze
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food
that won't be sufficient for
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good
health. It can be
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seen
, numerous reasons can
be issued
for having
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junk
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food
such as birthdays, gossiping with friends, corporate meetings, and
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so
on. Everyone depended on
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junk
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food
day by day. Number of
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fast
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food
restaurants have
rapidly
risen over the past 7 years. The restaurants are offering various
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types
of
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junk
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food
, caloric
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food
such as sugar, drink, Chinese
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food
, and
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so
on. There are several
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good
reasons that can compel one to go in
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favour
of the statement. According to the research statistics,
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people
all over the universe tend to have
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fast
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food
even when they
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meet
with several
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problems
such as dietary
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problems
. Another reason can
be found
for dietary
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problems
such as smoking, and
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so
on. These
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types
of habits can be issues that
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people
cannot control healthy lifestyle. Research
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shows
that,
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people
who have dietary the percentage is increasing nowadays.

In addition
to these, there are differences between rural
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areas
and urban
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areas
. The
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people
who
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lived
in the rural
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areas
suffer from
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many
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types
of even simple diseases
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only
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because
of their inability to benefit from these health-related published materials as they lack the ability to read.
However
, the situation is opposite those who
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lived
in the urban
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areas
. This
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problem
can
be solved
by changing
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some
lifestyle
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rules
.
Firstly
,
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think
about
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food
that has
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a lot of
calories, sugar and
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fat
and it should
be avoided
.
Secondly
, smoking provides a basis for an unhealthy life
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so
that these
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types
of drugs should
be avoided
.
Finally
,
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people
should have
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watched
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tv
series or newspaper
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because
several
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types
of
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problems
and solutions can
be found
from which.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that
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junk
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food
, even drugs can be the cause of dietary
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problems
.
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Therefore
the
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government
should enhance consciousness about healthy life.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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