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Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v.10

Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 10
Nowadays, several people are having a hard time maintaining their diets to a healthy level. While the main causes of such problem are lack of discipline from individuals and governments imposing higher prices of good quality foods, there are also practical ways that can be done to solve this issue. There are two main reasons why a healthy diet is not maintained by people. Firstly, many are not disciplined when it comes to a healthy eating pattern. This is because a lot of individuals today are not aware of the risks of having detrimental diseases, such as heart attack or stroke, when a healthy diet is not properly practiced. Secondly, people opt cut back from healthy food due to the high prices of good food that governments insist. Many among the poor population cannot afford this and thus, choose to buy cheap and unhealthy food, including fast foods, that increases their risk of becoming obese, which then could add more health problems in the future. Nevertheless, practical ways to solve the problem of maintaining a healthy diet are manageable. One of these solutions would be to raise the awareness of the people with regards to the benefits of eating healthy food continuously. Governments, for instance, can strengthen the advertisements about the importance of a balanced diet and its sources. Another way to address the issue of keeping a healthy diet is for individuals to start their own vegetable gardens. This will lower the costs of food budget while ensuring that people are eating fresh and organic homegrown crops; thus, can increase their motivation and will to maintain a healthy diet. In conclusion, though there are causes of why people struggle to keep their food intake healthy, steps to solve it are possible if strictly followed and implied by the individuals and the government.
Nowadays, several
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people
are having a
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hard
time maintaining their diets to a
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healthy
level. While the main causes of such problem are lack of discipline from
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individuals
and
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governments
imposing higher prices of
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good
quality
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foods
, there are
also
practical ways that can
be done
to solve this issue.

There are two main reasons why a
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healthy
diet is not maintained by
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people
.
Firstly
,
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many
are not disciplined when it
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comes
to a
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healthy
eating pattern. This is
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because
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a lot of
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individuals
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today
are not aware of the
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risks
of having detrimental diseases, such as heart attack or stroke, when a
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healthy
diet is not
properly
practiced.
Secondly
,
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people
opt
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cut
back from
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healthy
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food
due to the high prices of
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good
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food
that
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governments
insist.
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Many
among the poor population cannot afford this and
thus
, choose to
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buy
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cheap
and unhealthy
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food
, including
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fast
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foods
, that increases their
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risk
of becoming obese, which then could
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add
more health problems in the future.

Nevertheless
, practical ways to solve the problem of maintaining a
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healthy
diet are manageable. One of these solutions would be to raise the awareness of the
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people
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
the benefits of eating
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healthy
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food
continuously
.
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Governments
,
for instance
, can strengthen the advertisements about the importance of a balanced diet and its sources. Another way to address the issue of keeping a
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healthy
diet is for
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individuals
to
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start
their
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own
vegetable gardens. This will lower the costs of
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food
budget while ensuring that
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people
are eating fresh and organic homegrown crops;
thus
, can increase their motivation and will to maintain a
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healthy
diet.

In conclusion
, though there are causes of why
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people
struggle to
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keep
their
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food
intake
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healthy
, steps to solve it are possible if
strictly
followed and implied by the
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individuals
and the
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government
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people have difficulty maintaining a healthy diet. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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