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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.7

Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. v. 7
Making new friends through the social media and online chat groups, such as We Chat and Facebook became very popular in citizen’s everyday live. Some people believe this method is great, but others hold an idea of a face to face way is better. This essay will discuss both views and give my opinion. On one hand, making friends online has more opportunities to meet people worldwide with a common topic. This phenomenon is often based on a talk or argument about a same amusing topic, and the participants might come from different countries with diverse cultures. For example, when a new food video post by a food blogger on Facebook, that might attract thousands of food lovers all over the world to watch and join the discussion. Thus, they could make a group of new friends who live in different areas with a similar habit. However, a lack of personal information presenting online is hard to make the friendship deeply, because people could know each other only through certain photos and word messages, which is hard for them understand others well. On the other hand, making friends by face to face might be a better way to make some real friends in people’s life. When individual handout and take a conversation that is more information would be performed, such as body languages, tone of voice and expression of feeling, which could help them understand others better and build up the trust efficiently. For instance, when two strangers meet and talk, they could make a decision the person could become a friend or not via observe the other’s behaviours. Whereas, the region of individual activities could limit the number of people they can reach, and reduce the chance to know some strangers. In conclusion, I think people could make a lot of ordering new friends online easy, however, if they want to make some friend in the real world with deep friendship that the face to face way could be better.
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and Facebook became
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popular in citizen’s everyday
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live
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people
believe this method is great,
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others hold an
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idea
of a
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. This essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.

On one hand, making
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friends
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online
has more opportunities to
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meet
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people
worldwide with a common topic. This phenomenon is
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often
based on a talk or argument about a same amusing topic, and the participants might
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come
from
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different
countries with diverse cultures.
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, when a
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new
food video post by a food blogger on Facebook, that might attract thousands of food lovers all over the world to
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watch
and
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join
the discussion.
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a group of
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friends
who
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in
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different
areas with a similar habit.
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online
is
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hard
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make
the friendship
deeply
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people
could know each
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through certain photos and word messages, which is
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for them understand others well.

On the
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hand, making
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friends
by
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to
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real
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in
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life. When individual handout and take a conversation
that is
more information would
be performed
, such as body languages, tone of voice and expression of feeling, which could
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help
them understand others
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better
and build up the trust
efficiently
.
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, when two strangers
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meet
and talk, they could
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a decision the person could become a
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friend
or not via observe the
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other’s
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. Whereas, the region of individual activities could limit the number of
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people
they can reach, and
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the chance to know
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some
strangers.

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, I
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ordering
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friends
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easy,
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in the real world with deep friendship that the
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way could be
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.
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IELTS essay Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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