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You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do abo v.2

You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do abo v. 2
It is widely believed that the foremost thing in life is work, so only having a successful career would lead to a meaningful life. From my perspective, I totally agree with this opinion, and will give my reasons below. Firstly, carving out a great career is the most effective way to enhance a person’s living quality. It is undeniable that the better careers people have, the higher income they generate. For instance, a recent study by Banking Academy of Vietnam found that the salary of the CEO of Vietinbank in 2018 registered approximately 100, 000 US dollars per year, in comparison with only about 13, 000 US dollars of an average teller. Thanks to this higher income, they will be able to increase their quality of life with a larger amount of money spent on education and healthcare services. Furthermore, a prosperous career also has the ability to improve a person’s social status. Perhaps the best example of this is Barack Obama, who is one of the most well-known politicians all over the world. He had a distinguished political career as the 44th president of the US from 2009 to 2017. This can be further seen in the fact that during his term in office, America's soft power and reputation abroad considerably improved. He, with his brilliant career, always is respected by both the US residents and the oversea ones, even after he left office and retired in 2017. This demonstrates, I believe that high social status is attached to career success. In conclusion, it seems to me that work plays a vital role in people’s life; therefore, it is essential for them to advance their careers successfully due to the above-mentioned two reasons
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widely
believed that the foremost thing in
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life
is work,
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so
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only
having a successful
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career
would lead to a meaningful
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life
. From my perspective, I
totally
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agree
with this opinion, and will give my reasons below.

Firstly
, carving out a great
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career
is the most effective way to enhance a person’s living quality. It is undeniable that the better
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careers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
have, the higher income they generate.
For instance
, a recent study by Banking Academy of Vietnam found that the salary of the CEO of
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Vietinbank
in 2018 registered approximately 100, 000 US dollars per year,
in comparison
with
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only
about 13, 000 US dollars of an average teller. Thanks to this higher income, they will be able to increase their quality of
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life
with a larger amount of money spent on education and healthcare services.

Furthermore
, a prosperous
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career
also
has the ability to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
a person’s social status. Perhaps the best example of this is Barack Obama, who is one of the most well-known politicians all over the world. He had a distinguished political
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career
as the 44th president of the US from 2009 to 2017. This can be
further
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in the fact that during his term in office, America's soft power and reputation abroad
considerably
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
. He, with his brilliant
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career
, always
is respected
by both the US residents and the oversea ones, even after he
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left
office and retired in 2017. This demonstrates, I believe that high social status
is attached
to
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career
success.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that work plays a vital role in
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people
’s
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life
;
therefore
, it is essential for them to advance their
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careers
successfully
due to the above-mentioned two reasons
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay You travelled by plane last week and your suitcase was lost. You have still heard nothing from the airline company. Write to the airline and explain what happened. Describe your suitcase and tell them what was in it. Find out what they are going to do abo v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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