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Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. v. 3
There is no doubt that education has cultivated all the modern civilisations. While some people believe that going for higher studies is a better option, others argue that the working experience is required in many fields along with theory. I tend to agree with the latter argument and in this essay I will support my view with examples. The most significant advantage of the training is the practical knowledge. Everyone should understand that practical work along with the theoretical understanding will result in a deep understanding. For instance, if a student is trying to create a robot who can imitate human, should envisage bookish knowledge to build or use past references before creating an actual robot. Otherwise, he might face a lot of drawbacks and difficulties. In contrast, referring to old findings can assist him in creating a better prototype. As a result, he can make great use of Errors committed by others by not repeating them. Another compelling advantage of hands on experience is the Job prospects. In the current era, most of the companies look for the professionals with specialized understanding of the tools. For example, several Universities have designed curriculum as per the industry requirements. Also, have been updating the pedagogy regularly. As a result, the students attain better roles in the multinational companies. This has been a rising trend all around the globe, helping all classes of professionals and students to rise in their field of work. In conclusion, academic knowledge is must for anyone to understand the basic functionality, but should always be supported with practical understanding, making it more useful for them and for the people they work for. Therefore, In my opinion, the vocational training is as important as the theoretical study.
There is no doubt that education has cultivated all the modern
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civilisations
. While
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some
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people
believe that going for higher studies is a better option, others argue that the working experience
is required
in
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many
fields along with theory. I tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the latter argument and in this essay I will support my view with examples.

The most significant advantage of the training is the practical knowledge. Everyone should understand that practical work along with the theoretical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understanding
will result in a deep
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understanding
.
For instance
, if a student is trying to create a robot who can imitate human, should envisage bookish knowledge to build or
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
past references
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
creating an actual robot.
Otherwise
, he might face
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
drawbacks and difficulties.
In contrast
, referring to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
findings can assist him in creating a better prototype.
As a result
, he can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of Errors committed by others by not repeating them.

Another compelling advantage of hands on experience is the Job prospects. In the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
era, most of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
look for the professionals with specialized
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understanding
of the tools.
For example
, several Universities have designed curriculum as per the industry requirements.
Also
, have been updating the pedagogy
regularly
.
As a result
, the students attain better roles in the multinational
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
. This has been a rising trend all around the globe, helping all classes of professionals and students to rise in their field of work.

In conclusion
, academic knowledge is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
for anyone to understand the basic functionality,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
should always
be supported
with practical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
understanding
, making it more useful for them and for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
they work for.
Therefore
, In my opinion, the vocational training is as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
as the theoretical study.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people go to university for academic study. More people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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