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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree with this view? What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life? v.4

Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life? v. 4
Since death toll numbers on our roads have been increasing year on year basis. Some people believe that tougher rules must be implemented on teens like to have an eligibility age of 24 and over to drive, whilst other people believe that teen should be educated on effects of rash and drink driving which is one of the major causes of death on the road. I believe that setting an age limit for teens is not the solution and in this essay, we discuss how can find alternatives to this problem. There should be an age limit to when a teen can start riding a motorcycle, but rather than having them to learn a new skill later on in life, it can be productive to let them learn from 16-18 years of age with a learner license with several restrictions. Also, having various stages before getting a full license and heavy penalties for breaking any rules would be a positive way for a teenager to learn from his mistakes or to avoid mistakes overall. For example, a teen in Australia has to go through four stages of the license before he can apply for a full license, these stages run over four years and have a severe penalty if the rules are not followed according to the stage. Another way the government can help reduce the number of teen fatalities on the motorcycle is by educating them through ads. Placing the ads in an educational institute and on the roads can create awareness amongst the youth of the consequences of drink driving and rash driving. For example, New Zeeland government is placing advertisements on television, radio and the internet by showing how the accident victim regrets dangerous driving. Overall, I firmly believe, that rather than stopping teens from driving a motorcycle, we should implement a tougher procedure to obtain a license as well as creating awareness amongst the youth on the positives of safe driving.
Since
death toll numbers on our roads have been increasing
year
on
year
basis.
Some
people
believe
that tougher
rules
must
be implemented
on
teens
like to have an eligibility
age
of 24 and over to drive, whilst other
people
believe
that
teen
should
be educated
on effects of rash and drink
driving
which is one of the major causes of death on the road. I
believe
that setting an
age
limit for
teens
is not the solution and in this essay, we discuss how can find alternatives to this problem.

There should be an
age
limit to when a
teen
can
start
riding a motorcycle,
but
rather
than having them to learn a new
skill
later on in life, it can be productive to
let
them learn from 16-18 years of
age
with a learner
license
with several restrictions.
Also
, having various stages
before
getting a full
license
and heavy penalties for breaking any
rules
would be a
positive
way for a
teenager
to learn from his mistakes or to avoid mistakes
overall
.
For example
, a
teen
in Australia
has to
go through four stages of the
license
before
he can apply for a full
license
, these stages run over four years and have a severe penalty if the
rules
are not followed according to the stage.

Another way the
government
can
help
reduce
the number of
teen
fatalities on the motorcycle is by educating them through ads. Placing the ads in an educational institute and on the roads can create awareness amongst the youth of the consequences of drink
driving
and rash
driving
.
For example
,
New Zeeland
government
is placing advertisements on television, radio and the internet by showing how the accident victim regrets
dangerous
driving.

Overall
, I
firmly
believe
, that
rather
than stopping
teens
from
driving
a motorcycle, we should implement a tougher procedure to obtain a
license
as well
as creating awareness amongst the youth on the positives of safe
driving
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. What other things can people do in order to have a satisfying working life? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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