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Many people believe that university students should study a full range of subjects, instead of some specific subjects. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint? v.7

Many people believe that university students should study a full range of subjects, instead of some specific subjects. with this viewpoint? v. 7
Universities, the supreme citadels for building an enlightened generation, play a pivotal role in shaping a country' s destiny. Thus the curriculum these institutes follow to teach pupils has a profound impact on its overall outcome. Some scholars believe studying a wide range of subjects in tertiary level is far beneficial than restraining their studies to some particular subjects. I have reason to disagree with this view. First of all, universities cannot teach all the subjects to the disciples and the notion of teaching them a great number of subjects is impractical. For instance, an average university has more than 30 departments and they are meant to specialise students in a particular field, not make them the jack of all trades only to produce mediocre professionals. Many public universities are already struggling to finish the course in time and if more subjects are added, that would simply make the scenario worse. Furthermore, a medical student, when forced to study history and poetry, would feel less connected to those subjects, ultimately ending with less specialised knowledge and skill. Similarly, a student from literature would find solving higher calculus a real challenge. The university already has its departments that pick students based on their merits and interests and the course offering should stick to that. Finally, someone does not need to excel in all subjects to do better in his profession. If an engineering student is interested in studying history, he can always do that even the university curriculum does not include it. Many eminent scientists had little knowledge of other subjects and that did not deter them from changing the world forever and this can be a great example how specific subjects in tertiary level can be beneficial than the idea of adding a list of unrelated subjects. To conclude, the areas of studies, especially in this modern era, are myriad and thus adding a spectrum of subjects in every major is not at all a good idea.
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the curriculum these institutes follow to teach pupils has a profound impact on its
overall
outcome.
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Some
scholars believe studying a wide range of
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subjects
in tertiary level is far
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beneficial
than restraining their studies to
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some
particular
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subjects
. I have reason to disagree with this view.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
,
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universities
cannot teach all the
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subjects
to the disciples and the notion of teaching them a great number of
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subjects
is impractical.
For instance
, an average
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university
has more than 30
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departments and
they
are meant
to
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specialise
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students
in a particular field, not
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make
them the jack of all trades
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only
to produce mediocre professionals.
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Many
public
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universities
are already struggling to finish the course in time and if more
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subjects
are
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added
, that would
simply
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make
the scenario worse.

Furthermore
, a medical
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student
, when forced to study history and poetry, would feel less connected to those
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subjects
,
ultimately
ending with less
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specialised
knowledge and
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skill
.
Similarly
, a
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student
from literature would find solving higher calculus a real challenge. The
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university
already has its departments that pick
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students
based on their merits and interests and the course offering should stick to that.

Finally
, someone does not need to excel in all
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subjects
to do better in his profession. If an engineering
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student
is interested
in studying history, he can always do that even the
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university
curriculum does not include it.
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Many
eminent scientists had
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little
knowledge of other
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subjects
and that did not deter them from changing the world forever and this can be a great example how specific
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subjects
in tertiary level can be beneficial than the
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idea
of adding a list of unrelated subjects.

To conclude
, the areas of studies,
especially
in this modern era, are myriad and
thus
adding a spectrum of
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subjects
in every major is not at all a
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good
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idea
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people believe that university students should study a full range of subjects, instead of some specific subjects. with this viewpoint? v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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