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Billions of dollars are spent on space research. This is a waste of money. More money must be spent on improving the problem of people on earth. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Billions of dollars are spent on space research. This is a waste of money. More money must be spent on improving the problem of people on earth. v. 1
Nowadays, many countries across the globe are spending huge amount of money on space research programs. Rather than invest such amount of money in tackling the issues people face on earth. I believe that multi billion dollars spent on space research is an absolute waste of funds. Therefore, more cash should be spent on improving problems like global warming and health related issues which are of paramount significance to the people of this planet. Firstly, space research or travelling brings very little benefits. Space research as we all know is a very complicated issue, even if a new habitable planet is found in the galaxy, it can take up to two thousand light years to reach the surface of such planet. Thus, making it impossible and a complete waste of time. Secondly, space research cost a fortune as tons of cash are been used to finance such exploration. Such kind of hard earned cash should not be used for a project that is likely not to yield any dividend. Finally, space experimentation comes with a great danger and risk. As astronauts are made to come out of their shell and travel to outer space with a great unforeseeable consequences. Climate change also known as global warming is one of the most pressing matters on earth and require a very effective and swift action. More money should be poured into dealing with this problem and finding a long lasting solution in order to save this plant and the people within it. Every day climate change is afflicting the world severely. For example, typhoon, floods, and storm, just to name a few. If more money are continue been spent of space exploration and the challenges people face on earth are been ignored, the planet might get over run and then there wont be anyone left on it. Hence, it is better to save our planet first instead of exploring other planet. Health issues have been the major contributors to the increase in morbidity. People are dying by the minute from diseases, money for space research should be used to find a cure for deadly communicable illness. For example, Ebola which have claimed the life of over one billion people in Africa. protecting the people of the earth is of prime importance and should be the priority. To conclude, space research is a luxury with no significant long term benefits. So money spent on such experiments are waste of cash, and should instead be channeled into improving the life of the people in our planet and saving the earth from dying out.
Nowadays,
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countries across the globe are spending huge amount of
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on
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programs.
Rather
than invest such amount of
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money
in tackling the
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issues
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people
face on
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earth
. I believe that multi billion dollars
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spent
on
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space
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research
is an absolute waste of funds.
Therefore
, more
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cash
should be
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spent
on improving problems like global warming and health related
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issues
which are of paramount significance to the
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people
of this planet.

Firstly
,
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space
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research
or travelling brings
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very
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little
benefits.
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Space
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research
as we all know is a
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very
complicated
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issue
, even if a new habitable
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planet
is found
in the galaxy, it can take up to two thousand light years to reach the surface of such
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planet
.
Thus
, making it impossible and a complete waste of time.
Secondly
,
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space
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research
cost a fortune as tons of
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cash
are been
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used
to finance such exploration. Such kind of
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hard earned
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cash
should not be
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used
for a project
that is
likely not to yield any dividend.
Finally
,
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space
experimentation
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comes
with a great
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danger
and
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risk
. As astronauts
are made
to
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come
out of their shell and travel to outer
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space
with a great unforeseeable
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consequences
.

Climate
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change
also
known as global warming is one of the most pressing matters on
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earth
and require a
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very
effective and swift action. More
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money
should
be poured
into dealing with this problem and finding a
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long lasting
solution in order to save this plant and the
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people
within it. Every day climate
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change
is afflicting the world
severely
.
For example
, typhoon, floods, and storm,
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just
to name a few. If more
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money
are
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continue
been
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spent
of
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space
exploration and the challenges
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people
face on
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earth
are been
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ignored
, the
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planet
might
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get
over run and then there
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wont
be anyone
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left
on it.
Hence
, it is better to save our
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planet
first
instead
of exploring other planet.

Health
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issues
have been the major contributors to the increase in morbidity.
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People
are dying by the minute from diseases,
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money
for
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space
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research
should be
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used
to find a cure for deadly communicable illness.
For example
, Ebola which have claimed the life of over one billion
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people
in Africa.
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protecting
the
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people
of the
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earth
is of prime importance and should be the priority.

To conclude
,
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space
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research
is a luxury with no significant long term benefits.
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So
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money
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spent
on such experiments are waste of
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cash
, and should
instead
be channeled
into improving the life of the
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people
in our
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planet
and saving the
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earth
from dying out.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Billions of dollars are spent on space research. This is a waste of money. More money must be spent on improving the problem of people on earth. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
429 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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