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Many people believe that the internet has made life much easier for most people. However, others fear that it might also represent a threat 1
Global athletic events such as the Olympics, the World Cup, the Extreme Games, and even the American Super Bowl are incredible opportunities for countries. These iconic spectacles can provide a country with an economic avalanche of benefits or expose it to a public relations disaster. This essay will look at both points, using Russia and the United Kingdom as examples. Firstly, it is important to bear in mind that simply hosting the event and having the world’s media attention cannot guarantee a positive promotion. This is because although the country is receiving enormous amounts of publicity, the media will often report controversial news as well as. Take the Winter Olympics in Sochi, Russia, for example. The media spotlight is shining bright on the athletes, but also highlighting the polemic legislation regarding homosexuality. Therefore, despite the international recognition to be gained, the country can also face a possible backlash. Secondly, the expense of building large infrastructures necessary to hold these events can dwarf the benefits, unless they are fully amortized afterwards. This is largely due to the fact that stadiums, Olympic parks, ski run etc. Are expensive to construct and undertake large capital expenditure, often by the public sector. In the Commonwealth Games in Manchester in 2002, the council commissioned a stadium for athletic events which was later adapted and sold to the local preeminent football club, Manchester City. Therefore, with proper, fair, economic management of such buildings and facilities the cost can be recuperated. To conclude, a host city or nation has a lot to gain from these events, but only if they are economically administered correctly and the country has no controversial issues for the media to pull out of the closet.
Global athletic
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events
such as the Olympics, the World Cup, the Extreme Games, and even the American Super Bowl are incredible opportunities for
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countries
. These iconic spectacles can provide a
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country
with an economic avalanche of benefits or expose it to a public relations disaster. This essay will look at both points, using Russia and the United Kingdom as examples.

Firstly
, it is
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important
to bear in mind that
simply
hosting the
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event
and having the world’s
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media
attention cannot guarantee a
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positive
promotion. This is
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because
although the
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country
is receiving enormous amounts of publicity, the
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media
will
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often
report controversial news
as well
as. Take the Winter Olympics in Sochi, Russia,
for example
. The
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media
spotlight is shining bright on the athletes,
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but
also
highlighting the polemic legislation regarding homosexuality.
Therefore
, despite the international recognition to
be gained
, the
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country
can
also
face a possible backlash.

Secondly
, the expense of building large infrastructures necessary to hold these
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events
can dwarf the benefits, unless they are
fully
amortized afterwards. This is
largely
due to the fact that stadiums, Olympic parks, ski run etc. Are expensive to construct and undertake large capital expenditure,
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often
by the public sector. In the Commonwealth Games in Manchester in 2002, the council commissioned a stadium for athletic
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events
which was later adapted and sold to the local preeminent football club, Manchester City.
Therefore
, with proper,
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fair
, economic management of such buildings and facilities the cost can
be recuperated
.

To conclude
, a host city or nation has a lot to gain from these
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events
,
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but
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only
if they are
economically
administered
correctly
and the
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country
has no controversial issues for the
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media
to pull out of the closet.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that the internet has made life much easier for most people. However, others fear that it might also represent a threat 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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