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You recently took a trip to another city, and you had a plan to visit your friend who is living there. However, you couldn’t see him/her. Write a letter to your friend, and say– Apologize for not being able to meet. – Give your reasons. – Suggest ho v.1

You recently took a trip to another city, and you had a plan to visit your friend who is living there. However, you couldn’t see him/her. Write a letter to your friend, and say– Apologize for not being able to meet. – Give your reasons. – Suggest ho v. 1
Hardworking in right path is always considered as a key to success. Many people believe to work hard during study and job than others, however, it can also be argued how often hard working can be beneficial. This essay shall discuss both views separately. Life is a competition, everyone just trying to work harder so they can achieve life goals. People who work hard, have progressive motives that force them to work more than others in their respective field. These people tend to get a good position in society through their hard work. For instance, my one friend during university times, use to concentrate at studies more than other classmates. This exhaustive study habit led him to get a gold medal in university. It is a fact that hard working is always considered as best. In this competing world, if we wish to get a higher position. Hence, we must work hard. Therefore, people who spend more time on studies and work hard at their jobs, likely to get more success in all platforms of life as compared to other normal working individuals. For example, one of my friends’ company had implemented KPI's (key performance Indicators) for all jobs. As a result, now he is being monitored by these KPI's. In addition, due to his hardworking nature, he had attained two job promotion in a year's time. To conclude, the day we start our life, the most common phrase we hear is working hard either you are studying or working. Therefore, it’s mandatory for us if we want to win the race of this highly challenging life, we should work harder to attain our desired goals in life.
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can be beneficial. This essay shall discuss both views
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trying to
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work
harder
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they can achieve
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life
goals.
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who
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work
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, have progressive motives that force them to
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work
more than others in their respective field. These
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people
tend to
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get
a
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good
position in society through their
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work
.
For instance
, my one friend during university times,
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use to
concentrate at
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more than
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other
classmates. This exhaustive
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habit led him to
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get
a gold medal in university.

It is a fact that
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hard
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working
is always considered as best. In this competing world, if we wish to
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get
a higher position.
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, we
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must
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work
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hard
.
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,
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people
who spend more time on
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studies
and
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work
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hard
at their
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, likely to
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get
more success in all platforms of
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as compared to
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normal
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individuals.
For example
, one of my friends’
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company
had implemented KPI's (key performance Indicators) for all
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jobs
.
As a result
,
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now
he is
being monitored
by
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these KPI
's.
In addition
, due to his hardworking nature, he had attained two
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job
promotion in a year's time.

To conclude
, the day we
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start
our
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life
, the most common phrase we hear is
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working
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hard
either you are studying or
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working
.
Therefore
, it’s mandatory for us if we want to win the race of this
highly
challenging
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life
, we should
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work
harder to attain our desired goals in
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life
.
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You live a new life for every new language you speak. If you know only one language, you live only once.
Czech Proverb

IELTS essay You recently took a trip to another city, and you had a plan to visit your friend who is living there. However, you couldn’t see him/her. Write a letter to your friend, and say– Apologize for not being able to meet. – Give your reasons. – Suggest ho v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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