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Many people believe that the current generation of children does not know how to interact socially with others. Why is this the case? What can be done to encourage more social interaction between children? v.1

Many people believe that the current generation of children does not know how to interact socially with others. Why is this the case? What can be done to encourage more social interaction between children? v. 1
Homework is a necessary evil. I don’t know many children who actually enjoy doing their homework. Nonetheless, it is beneficial to their progress and that is the reason teachers give homework. However, sometimes, children are given too much homework and in such situations it may be necessary for the parents to help them. Children should do their homework on their own. Only then will they benefit. If parents do the homework the children are not getting the intended benefits. However, there are at least a few situations where this may be necessary. Young children, especially those attending KG or primary school, will need their parents’ assistance to complete their homework and other activities. Older children may also need their parents’ help from time to time. In a country like India, children, especially those going to private schools, are burdened with too much homework. After completing their work, they get hardly any time to study. In such situations, they need the help of their parents. Just because students are doing their homework, it doesn’t mean that they are actually paying attention to what they are doing. A lot of them simply copy answers from their notebook. As a result, they aren’t gaining anything from this exercise. They need to learn the answers to score higher grades in the examination. If they spend too much time on their homework, their score will suffer. To conclude, students are supposed to do their homework on their own. However, this is not always possible because of time constraints. In such situations, parents should lend a helping hand.
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is a necessary evil. I don’t know
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many
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children
who actually enjoy doing their
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homework
. Nonetheless, it is beneficial to their progress and
that is
the reason teachers give
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homework
.
However
,
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sometimes
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children
are
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given
too much
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homework
and in such
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situations
it may be necessary for the
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parents
to
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help
them.

Children should do their
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homework
on their
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own
.
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Only
then will they benefit.
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parents
do the
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homework
the
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children
are not getting the intended benefits.
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, there are at least a few
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situations
where this may be necessary. Young
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children
,
especially
those attending KG or primary school, will
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need
their
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parents’
assistance to complete their
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homework
and other activities. Older
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children
may
also
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need
their
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help
from
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time
to time.

In a country like India,
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children
,
especially
those going to private schools,
are burdened
with too much
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homework
. After completing their work, they
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get
hardly any
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time
to study. In such
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, they
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help
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parents
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because
students are doing their
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homework
, it doesn’t mean that they are actually paying attention to what they are doing.
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A lot of
them
simply
copy answers from their notebook.
As a result
, they aren’t gaining anything from this exercise. They
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need
to learn the answers to score higher grades in the examination. If they spend too much
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time
on their
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homework
, their score will suffer.

To conclude
, students
are supposed
to do their
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homework
on their
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own
.
However
, this is not always possible
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because
of
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time
constraints. In such
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situations
,
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parents
should lend a helping hand.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that the current generation of children does not know how to interact socially with others. Why is this the case? What can be done to encourage more social interaction between children? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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