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Many people believe that name brand items are very important. Discuss advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion. v.1

Many people believe that name brand items are very important. Discuss advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion. v. 1
Some people are of the opinion that charitable organization should extend giving to countries outside their home country while others feel that all of these activities are best excluded from other nations of the world. In this essay, I will examine the both sides of the arguments and I will state my opinion about the topic. One side of the argument believes that aides of various kinds should be extended outside the shores of the home country since there are sometimes nations who are more in needs of helping hands. For example, a few decades ago, some African countries were in total distress needing food and financial supplies, but with the intervention of WHO and some other nations pulling in their resources to foster this development eventually restored in the peace within those regions. In addition, this assistance gives and promote a sense of belonging when these organizations offer such bounty assistance. For instance, the intervention of various health organizations to nations such Libya, Syria and other parts suffering from the impact of war since to detail more on the significance of such generosity. These nations, sometimes like NATO help some countries along side with UNICEF providing a certain degree of shelter in these nations to help them through those hard times. On the other sides of the argument, it is believed that concentrating internally would help make such degree of help be sufficient in this mother country. For examples, charity cost more than fortune to run and these resources provided are limited and it is required the effect should be felt the most in within. But when these activities are extended far abroad, it could invariably reduce its effectiveness. Another reason is that, it also saves less not spending too much. Finances are always limited and that means if the expenses are not curtailed it could likewise be the downfall of such organization. In conclusion, it is important to note that both sides of the arguments have their merits and demerits, but based on the fact that helping aides collaboration and great sense of belong, I agree with argument stating that it's better to give aid to this nation even outside our territories.
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are of the opinion that charitable organization should extend giving to
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countries
outside their home
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country
while others feel that all of these activities are best excluded from
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other
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nations
of the world. In this essay, I will examine the both
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sides
of the
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arguments
and I will state my opinion about the topic.

One side of the
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argument
believes that aides of various kinds should
be extended
outside the shores of the home
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country
since there are
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sometimes
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nations
who are more in needs of helping hands.
For example
, a few decades ago,
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some
African
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countries
were in total distress needing food and financial supplies,
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but
with the intervention of WHO and
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some
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other
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nations
pulling in their resources to foster this development
eventually
restored in the peace within those regions.
In addition
, this assistance gives and promote a sense of belonging when these organizations offer such bounty assistance.
For instance
, the intervention of various health organizations to
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nations
such Libya, Syria and
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other
parts suffering from the impact of war since to detail more on the significance of such generosity. These
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nations
,
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sometimes
like NATO
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help
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some
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countries
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with UNICEF providing a certain degree of shelter in these
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nations
to
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help
them through those
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hard
times.

On the
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other
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sides
of the
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argument
, it
is believed
that concentrating
internally
would
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help
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make
such degree of
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help
be sufficient in this mother
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country
. For examples, charity cost more than fortune to run and these resources provided
are limited
and it
is required
the effect should
be felt
the most in within.
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when these activities
are extended
far abroad, it could
invariably
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reduce
its effectiveness. Another reason is that, it
also
saves less not spending too much. Finances are always limited and that means if the expenses are not curtailed it could
likewise
be the downfall of such organization.

In conclusion
, it is
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important
to note that both
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sides
of the
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arguments
have their merits and demerits,
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but
based on the fact that helping aides collaboration and great sense of belong, I
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agree
with
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argument
stating that it's better to give aid to this
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nation
even outside our territories.
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IELTS essay Many people believe that name brand items are very important. Discuss advantages and disadvantages and give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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