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Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood this should be resident's responsibility's while others think it should be governments's duty. What is your opinion? v.1

Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood this should be resident's responsibility's while others think it should be governments's duty. What is your opinion? v. 1
Numerous of people might say that it is inhabitant's liability to gleaming up the public roads in their locality; whilst, opponents asserts that it ought to be administration's responsibility. I believe that, while individual have some responsibilities, the prior duty is belong to government which I will discuss before coming to a reasoned coclusion. First and the foremost reason that why government is responsible to cleaned up the public streets in their zone is that administration must provides a robust infrastructure to waste management. High authorities has ti build waste collection boxes in each street and has to build a team of people. To elaborate, if administration provide dustbins in every street then people can dump rubbish in the boxes and also the team has to collect litter from dustbins, everyday. The another reason has to implement the law in nation. To explain, authorities need to make strict law for notions that every personhas to throw garbage in lavish boxes, if dwellers do not follow yhe rule, they severely punish that others learn lesson. As a result, by this way this problem can be sort out. In contrast, along with government'ts responsibility, it is individuals responsibility as well to keep their locality clean. Firstly, residents are immediate effectors with unhealthy and fithy environment. To exemplify, if people are unable to keep surrounding clean, so, when dengue outbreaks from dross, they would be affected first. Next, people should clean outside from house. To explain, when people keep their house clean, they should mopping outside as well. Thus, residents of locality are responsible for their area clean. To conclude, after analysing whole essay, I firmly believe that although, government has important role to play to cleaned up country, yet the prior duty is belong to citizens to keep public roads clean.
Numerous of
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might say that it is inhabitant's liability to gleaming up the public roads in their locality; whilst, opponents asserts that it ought to be administration's
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responsibility
. I believe that, while individual have
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some
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responsibilities
, the prior duty is
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belong
to
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government
which I will discuss
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before
coming to a reasoned
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coclusion
.

First
and the foremost reason that why
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government
is responsible to cleaned up the public streets in their zone is that administration
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must
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provides
a robust infrastructure to waste management. High authorities has ti build waste collection boxes in each street and
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has to
build a team of
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people
. To elaborate, if administration provide dustbins in every street then
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people
can dump rubbish in the boxes and
also
the team
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has to
collect litter from dustbins,
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everyday
. The another reason
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has to
implement the law in nation. To
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explain
, authorities need to
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make
strict law for notions that every
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personhas
to throw garbage in lavish boxes, if dwellers do not follow
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yhe
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rule
, they
severely
punish that others learn lesson.
As a result
, by this way this problem can be sort out.

In contrast
, along with
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government
'ts
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responsibility
, it is individuals
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responsibility
as well
to
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keep
their locality
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clean
.
Firstly
, residents are immediate effectors with unhealthy and
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fithy
environment. To exemplify, if
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people
are unable to
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keep
surrounding
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clean
,
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so
, when dengue outbreaks from dross, they would be
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affected
first
.
Next
,
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people
should
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clean
outside from
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house
. To
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explain
, when
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people
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keep
their
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house
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clean
, they should
The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: "mop"
mopping
outside
as well
.
Thus
, residents of locality are responsible for their area clean.

To conclude
, after
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analysing
whole essay, I
firmly
believe that although,
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government
has
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important
role to play to cleaned up country,
yet
the prior duty is
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belong
to citizens to
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keep
public roads
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clean
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood this should be resident's responsibility's while others think it should be governments's duty. What is your opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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