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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. To what extent do you agree? v.1

Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. v. 1
A large portion of individuals hold the opinion that, learning how to cook is an imperative quality to surive, therefore, cooking classes should be a part of school curriculums. On the contrary, some refute this belief and think that these classes would be a waste of valuable teaching time. I firmly disgree with this opinion. Firstly, providing food lessons in primary education allows children to grow up and be independent, so if anything, it is a great way to spend time in school. This is because preparing one's own lunch or dinner is an important skill to have. By teaching this from a young age, kids are able to depend on themselves and feed themselves. In addition to this, as they grow older they are able to save alot of money that would be spent on take out, due to the fact that home cooked meals are much more affordable and healthier. For example, a meal at a fast food place like KFC would cost around 6 pounds, whereas by teaching children how to cook, they can spend those 6 pounds on ingredients like a kg of rice and chicken which would collectively cost 3 pounds. Secondly, school is not only a place to learn academic subjects like Maths and Physics. For instance, sports are also taught in schools and are not considered to be a 'waste of time', in fact, sports lessons are seen as a good way to release energy and stay healthy. Cooking class's should be given the same level of importance because they also faciliate healthier lifestyles and expand skill sets. Furthermore, cooking class's can be incorporated in other subjects such as biology and chemistry, as food is closely related to these subjects and can be a fun creative way to learn. For instance, in primary school i was taught about chemical boiling points by cooking rice in water and measuring its temperature. In conclusion, being able to make your own food is a quality that should be enahnced in primary education and taught to males and females. In the future, i hope these classes are available in all school curriculum's.
A large portion of individuals hold the opinion that, learning how to cook is an imperative quality to
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surive
,
therefore
, cooking classes should be a part of
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school
curriculums.
On the contrary
,
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some
refute this belief and
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think
that these classes would be a waste of valuable teaching time. I
firmly
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disgree
with this opinion.

Firstly
, providing
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food
lessons in primary education
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allows
children to grow up and be independent,
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so
if anything, it is a great way to spend time in
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school
. This is
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because
preparing one's
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own
lunch or dinner is an
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important
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skill
to have. By teaching this from a young age, kids are able to depend on themselves and feed themselves.
In addition
to this, as they grow older they are able to save
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alot
of money that would
be spent
on take out, due to the fact that home cooked meals are much more affordable and healthier.
For example
, a meal at a
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fast
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food
place like KFC would cost around
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6 pounds
, whereas by teaching children how to cook, they can spend those
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6 pounds
on ingredients like a kg of rice and chicken which would
collectively
cost
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3 pounds
.

Secondly
,
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school
is not
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only
a place to learn academic subjects like
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Maths
and Physics.
For instance
, sports are
also
taught in
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schools
and are not considered to be a 'waste of time', in fact, sports lessons are
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seen
as a
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good
way to release energy and stay healthy. Cooking
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class
's should be
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given
the same level of importance
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because
they
also
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faciliate
healthier lifestyles and expand
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skill
sets.
Furthermore
, cooking
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class
's can
be incorporated
in other subjects such as biology and chemistry, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
is
closely
related to these subjects and can be a fun creative way to learn.
For instance
, in primary
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school
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
was taught
about chemical boiling points by cooking rice in water and measuring its temperature.

In conclusion
, being able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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food
is a quality that should be
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enahnced
in primary education and taught to males and females. In the future,
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i
hope these classes are available in all
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school
curriculum's.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
355 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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