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Many people are choosing to live on their own. Is this a positive or a negative trend? What is your opinion and share your personal experiences? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Many people are choosing to live on their own. Is this a positive or a negative trend? What is your opinion and share your personal experiences? v. 2
A famous adage says "Union is strength", but the joint family concept has become very uncommon these days, people mostly prefer to live in a nuclear family setup. Some people argue that this is a positive development while others believe in a contrary. In this essay, I will analyse the pros and cons of both the sides and conclude my opinion. On the one hand, the greatest strength of being in a joint family is elder's support in bringing up a child. Nowadays, the number of young parents visiting a parenting counsellor has been increased manifold. The reason behind this is lack of experience, whereas our grandparents have taught these parenting tips on a daily basis for our parents in an easy way. Secondly, for any small emergency, elderly people possess the required knowledge to prepare some homemade medicine for a temporary or a permanent cure/remedy which in turn, avoids the doctor visit and thereby we can save a lot of money. For example, when my younger sister was suffering from a very bad toothache one day on a midnight, my grandma provided a medicine prepared with the help of cloves. It really helped him by minimizing the pain and allowed him to sleep that day. On the other hand, one disadvantage of living in a joint family is, it requires adjustments in various aspects. The family will have their own rules and regulations like sleeping on time, even if you want to study for your exams you cannot stretch yourself at night as it might affect the rest of them. Furthermore, you can't take any independent decision either on your own or within the parents. It should be discussed with each and every adult in the abode, so you really can't have a personal space which you have to sacrifice. For instance, my school friend Maya wanted to study medicine after her higher secondary, even her parent was in agreement initially, but their family members canvassed them, saying, if she has been sent for a long distance from home then she will elope with someone later on. Finally, she was allowed to study some three year arts course in a local institution. To conclude, although there are few disadvantages in being with the joint family, it is always possible to overcome those by talking to them with all the favourable points that we have. This essay clearly highlights that the positives overweigh the negatives so it is not a positive trend, it's high time to reverse the trend.
A
famous
adage says
"
Union is strength
"
,
but
the
joint
family
concept has become
very
uncommon these days,
people
mostly
prefer to
live
in a nuclear
family
setup.
Some
people
argue that this is a
positive
development while others believe in a contrary. In this essay, I will
analyse
the pros and cons of both the sides and conclude my opinion.

On the one hand, the greatest strength of being in a
joint
family
is elder's support in bringing up a child. Nowadays, the number of young
parents
visiting a parenting
counsellor
has
been increased
manifold. The reason behind this is lack of experience, whereas our grandparents have taught these parenting tips on a daily basis for our
parents
in an easy way
.
Secondly
, for any
small
emergency, elderly
people
possess the required knowledge to prepare
some
homemade medicine for a temporary or a permanent cure/remedy which in turn, avoids the doctor visit and thereby we can save
a lot of
money.
For example
, when my younger sister was suffering from a
very
bad
toothache one day on a midnight, my grandma provided a medicine prepared with the
help
of cloves. It
really
helped
him by minimizing the pain and
allowed
him to sleep that day.

On the other hand
, one disadvantage of living in a
joint
family
is, it requires adjustments in various aspects. The
family
will have their
own
rules
and regulations like sleeping on time, even if you want to study for your exams you cannot stretch yourself at night as it might affect the rest of them.
Furthermore
, you can't take any independent decision either on your
own
or within the
parents
. It should
be discussed
with each and every adult in the abode,
so
you
really
can't have a personal space which you
have to
sacrifice.
For instance
, my school friend Maya wanted to study medicine after her higher secondary, even her
parent
was in agreement
initially
,
but
their
family
members canvassed them, saying, if she has been
sent
for a long distance from home then she will elope with someone later on.
Finally
, she was
allowed
to study
some
three year arts course in a local institution.

To conclude
, although there are few disadvantages in being with the
joint
family
, it is always possible to overcome those by talking to them with all the
favourable
points that we have. This essay
clearly
highlights that the positives
overweigh
the negatives
so
it is not a
positive
trend, it's high time to reverse the trend.
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IELTS essay Many people are choosing to live on their own. Is this a positive or a negative trend? What is your opinion and share your personal experiences? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
419 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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