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In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion on the roads. What are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v.1

In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion on the roads. What are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1
In urban centres around the world, a great deal of time is wasted daily due to traffic jams. This is a serious issue because it affects people's livelihoods and mental health. This essay will consider the main causes of traffic congestion, before proposing two possible solutions. Perhaps the most important cause of traffic problems in cities is a lack of public transport. With few alternatives, many people choose to travel by car, as it is quicker and more convenient. As a result, traffic jams occur, particularly on popular routes such as main roads. Another key factor is uniform working hours across the city. The majority of people start and finish work or school at a similar time. This means that the roads become extremely congested at certain times of day, for instance, at "rush hour" in the mornings and evenings. Fortunately, however, there are two promising solutions to this problem. First of all, local governments should invest more in public transport. This would make this option more attractive and reduce the number of cars on the road. For example, in my city, the council has created a network of cycle paths which encourage people to cycle to work. Secondly, the city government could introduce different working hours for schools and public facilities, which would further cut down the number of commuters travelling at particular times. In conclusion, traffic congestion is a serious problem which is primarily caused by limited public transport options, along with the shared working schedule of many city dwellers. I recommend that governments address this issue by investing in public transport infrastructure, and implementing varied working hours in public facilities.
In urban
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around the world, a great deal of time
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daily due to
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traffic
jams. This is a serious issue
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because
it affects
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people
's livelihoods and mental health. This essay will consider the main causes of
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traffic
congestion,
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before
proposing two possible solutions.

Perhaps the most
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important
cause of
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traffic
problems in
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cities
is a lack of
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public
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transport
. With few alternatives,
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many
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people
choose to travel by car, as it is quicker and more convenient.
As a result
,
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traffic
jams occur,
particularly
on popular routes such as main roads. Another key factor is uniform
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working
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hours
across the city. The majority of
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people
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start
and finish work or school at a similar time. This means that the roads become
extremely
congested at certain times of day,
for instance
, at
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rush hour
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in the mornings and evenings.

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however
, there are two promising solutions to this problem.
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First of all
, local
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governments
should invest more in
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public
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transport
. This would
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make
this option more attractive and
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reduce
the number of cars on the road.
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, in my city, the council has created a network of cycle paths which encourage
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people
to cycle to work.
Secondly
, the city
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government
could introduce
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different
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working
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hours
for schools and
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public
facilities, which would
further
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cut
down the number of commuters travelling at particular times.

In conclusion
,
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traffic
congestion is a serious problem which is
primarily
caused by limited
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public
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transport
options, along with the shared
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working
schedule of
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many
city dwellers. I recommend that
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governments
address this issue by investing in
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public
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transport
infrastructure, and implementing varied
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working
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hours
in
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public
facilities.
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IELTS essay In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion on the roads. What are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
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