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Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should, therefore, be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should, therefore, be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. v. 1
In the contemporary world, the concern for the degrading environment is at the peak. Some people believe it is possible for an individual to make a difference, while others feel it cannot be solved without authorities intervening in the matter. In my opinion, the government has an indispensable role in such matters. To begin, many believe the task of saving mother nature is tedious for a single person. But if we introduce minor alterations to our day-to-day activities, we could probably eradicate the detrimental causes to our environment. For instance, we can always bring along a recycling bag while shopping so that usage of the plastic bag would decrease. These will definitely help in minimising the air pollution caused by burning plastic bags. Thus, such actions of an individual could lead to a healthy environment. In contrast, to individual actions, the government also plays a vital role in providing checks to many such activities disrupting our ecosystem. Governments can impose stringent rules to be followed by its people. For example, usage of plastic bags should be completely banned in the country, and this can only be forced by authorities. These regulations require judiciary powers to implement which reside with the respective officials. For this reason, the government plays the cardinal part in a process of abolishing effects causing damage to nature. To conclude, environmental degradation is increasing at an enormous rate. These problems should be tackled with the collaboration of an individual along with governments. I believe the governments have a prominent role in resolving these issues.
In the contemporary world, the concern for the degrading environment is at the peak.
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people
believe it is possible for an
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individual
to
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make
a difference, while others feel it cannot
be solved
without authorities intervening in the matter. In my opinion, the
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government
has an indispensable role in such matters.

To
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begin
,
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many
believe the task of saving mother nature is tedious for a single person.
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But
if we introduce minor alterations to our day-to-day activities, we could
probably
eradicate the detrimental causes to our environment.
For instance
, we can always bring along a recycling
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bag
while shopping
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so
that usage of the plastic
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bag
would decrease. These will definitely
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help
in
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minimising
the air pollution caused by burning plastic
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bags
.
Thus
, such actions of an
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individual
could lead to a healthy environment.

In contrast
, to
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individual
actions, the
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government
also
plays a vital role in providing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checks
to
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many
such activities disrupting our ecosystem.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Governments
can impose stringent
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
to
be followed
by its
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
For example
, usage of plastic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bags
should be completely banned in the country, and this can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be forced
by authorities. These regulations require judiciary powers to implement which reside with the respective officials.
For this reason
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
plays the cardinal part in a process of abolishing effects causing damage to nature.

To conclude
, environmental degradation is increasing at an enormous rate. These problems should
be tackled
with the collaboration of an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
along with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
. I believe the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
have a prominent role in resolving these issues.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should, therefore, be dealt with by the government while others believe that these problems can only be tackled by individuals. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 9.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 9.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 9.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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