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Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission outweighthe diadvantages? v.13

Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission outweighthe diadvantages? v. 13
People's interest in visiting museums is becoming increasingly popular these days. While some argue that the museums should not charge any entrance fee, many believe that these fees are crucial to keep them running. This essay will provide arguments why the advantages of these charges outweigh the disadvantages. First and foremost, most of the museums, globally, are funded by governments and since the state funding is usually not enough for these institutions, forcing them to take a nominal entrance fee from the visitors. For instance, the Australian Museum in Sydney comes under the government of NSW and have a yearly budget of around 2. 5 million dollars, but the total expense of the Museum is 3 million dollars pushing them to ask visitors to purchase tickets. On the other hand, many of these museums also having research departments which require constant funding in order to keep the research programs running therefore these admission tickets play a vital role in continuing these scientific searches. Moreover, these ticket purchases also help to pay for the regular maintenance in these museums which, obviously, are quite necessary to be taken care of. One of the disadvantages of the museums charging for entrance tickets is that many people try to avoid them if they are on a budget or if the museum has no exhibition running. This can cause a museum to run low on funds and can lead them to cost cutting, thus people's job can be at risk due to low earning in a financial year. All in all, apart from a very few disadvantages for these fees, I strongly believe that these ticket purchasing for entering the museum play an important role in running them as they not only play a vital role for tourist hotspots by promoting the culture and diversity of a country, but also provide a platform for researchers to search and discover many new species and life every year.
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People
's interest in visiting
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museums
is becoming
increasingly
popular these days. While
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some
argue that the
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museums
should not charge any entrance
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fee
,
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many
believe that these
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fees
are crucial to
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keep
them
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running
. This essay will provide arguments why the advantages of these charges outweigh the disadvantages.

First
and foremost, most of the
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museums
, globally,
are funded
by
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governments
and since the state funding is
usually
not
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enough
for these institutions, forcing them to take a nominal entrance
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fee
from the visitors.
For instance
, the Australian
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Museum
in Sydney
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comes
under the
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government
of NSW and have a yearly budget of around 2. 5 million dollars,
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but
the total expense of the
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Museum
is 3 million dollars pushing them to ask visitors to
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purchase
tickets.

On the other hand
,
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many
of these
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museums
also
having research departments which require constant funding in order to
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keep
the research programs
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running
therefore
these admission
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tickets
play a vital role in continuing these scientific searches.
Moreover
, these
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ticket
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purchases
also
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help
to pay for the regular maintenance in these
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museums
which,
obviously
, are quite necessary to
be taken
care of.

One of the disadvantages of the
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museums
charging for entrance
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tickets
is that
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many
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people
try to avoid them if they are on a budget or if the
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museum
has no exhibition
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running
. This can cause a
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museum
to run low on funds and can lead them to
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cost cutting
,
thus
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people
's job can be at
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risk
due to low earning in a financial year.

All in all, apart from a
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very
few disadvantages for these
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fees
, I
strongly
believe that these
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ticket
purchasing for entering the
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museum
play an
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important
role in
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running
them as they not
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only
play a vital role for tourist hotspots by promoting the culture and diversity of a country,
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but
also
provide a platform for researchers to search and discover
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many
new species and life every year.
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23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission outweighthe diadvantages? v. 13

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
321 words
6
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