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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
 Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. 7
There is no doubt that economic development is the main aim of any authority. While some individuals think that there are various kinds of progress that the government should put in his consideration. However, in this essay, i will discuss both views of the argument and provide my overall opinion. Generally speaking, there are a variety of reasons why governments believe that they should enhance their economy, and put this in their first target. Perhaps one of the main causes why the government in favor of interesting about strong economic status is because it raises the level of the quality of citizens' life, throughout publishing public services and also updating their infrastructures. Additionally, economic improvement helps the governments to overcome their social problems which they are suffering from it for decades. A good illustration for that nowadays international association reformers estimates the percentages of poverty in any country from its economical condition. Despite these arguments, there is a case of the view that the government not only put all their interest in the financial economy but also in other kinds related to our community. For example, saving a good economy in any place provides an appropriate environment for practicing different sorts of unpaid community works. This is because there are many unpaid associations and involuntary works depend on the status of the government's economy. Also, there are many benefits now that come from Art economy. this is due to a lot of money come from places which many persons visit, such as, theatres, Museums, and also Cinemas. In conclusion, i strongly agree that we should be concentrated on all types of economic administration not to be specific for one than another. Governments should put regulations to provide s good balance to utilize their economy perfectly.
There is no doubt that
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economic
development is the main aim of any authority.
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While
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some
individuals
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think
that there are various kinds of progress that the
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government
should
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put
in his consideration.
However
, in this essay,
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i
will discuss both views of the argument and provide my
overall
opinion.

Generally
speaking, there are a variety of reasons why
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governments
believe that they should enhance their
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economy
, and
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put
this in their
first
target. Perhaps one of the main causes why the
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government
in favor
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of interesting about
strong
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economic
status is
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because
it raises the level of the quality of citizens' life, throughout publishing public services and
also
updating their infrastructures.
Additionally
,
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economic
improvement
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helps
the
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governments
to overcome their social problems which they are suffering from it for decades. A
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good
illustration for that nowadays international association reformers estimates the percentages of poverty in any country from its economical condition.

Despite these arguments, there is a case of the view that the
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government
not
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only
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put
all their interest in the financial
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economy
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but
also
in other kinds related to our community.
For example
, saving a
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good
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economy
in any place provides an appropriate environment for practicing
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different
sorts of unpaid community works. This is
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because
there are
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many
unpaid associations and involuntary works depend on the status of the
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government
's
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economy
.
Also
, there are
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many
benefits
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now
that
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come
from Art
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economy
.
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this
is due to
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a lot of
money
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come
from places which
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many
persons visit, such as,
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theatres
, Museums, and
also
Cinemas.

In conclusion
,
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i
strongly
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agree
that we should
be concentrated
on all types of
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economic
administration not to be specific for
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one
than another.
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Governments
should
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put
regulations to provide s
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good
balance to utilize their
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economy
perfectly
.
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.

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