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Many museums and historical sites are mostly visited by foreign tourists, but not by local people. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to attract local people to these sites? v.1

Many museums and historical sites are mostly visited by foreign tourists, but not by local people. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to attract local people to these sites? v. 1
It is an undeniable fact that the historical places and museums have now become the sources of attraction only for the tourists. The lack of new attractive sources and high entry charges are the reasons behind the little interest of local people for these sites. To combat this issue, some measures are required to be taken by the authorities. The crucial reason for the less visit of natives to museums and historical places is that they feel bored while visiting such places. In other words, the natives are mostly familiar with the history of these buildings and visiting the same sites is considered a waste of time. Additionally, owing to the lack of new sources of attraction, the repetitive visits to these places generate a feeling of boredom. Another reason is the high entry fees for every visit, which often discourages the local visitors to spend money on visiting these places. For instance, a famous cultural site named 'Sada Pind' charges Rs. 1000 per person, for this reason, the natives avoid spending this much amount on every visit. Nevertheless, this issue can be resolved by taking some effective actions. Primarily, to make these places attractive for local visitors cultural events, exhibitions and animated shows should be organized by the government. To exemplify, in the famous temple 'Akshardham' the laser show is performed that describes different religious stories, this inculcates the curiosity for visiting the place among natives. Next, there should be free entry passes for the local people on some specific days, this will encourage people to visit these places more frequently. For example, the National Museum in Delhi offers free visits on weekends for local people. To conclude, the local people offer less interest in visiting historical places and museums, as they do not enjoy their visits to these places. To make these places more alluring, interesting events need to be organized and free entry passes should be given to native people.
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and
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have
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now
become the sources of attraction
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only
for the tourists. The lack of new attractive sources and high
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entry
charges are the
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reasons
behind the
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little
interest of
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local
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people
for these sites. To combat this issue,
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some
measures
are required
to
be taken
by the authorities.

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reason
for the less
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visit
of
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natives
to
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museums
and historical
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places
is that they feel bored while visiting such
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places
.
In other words
, the
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natives
are
mostly
familiar with the history of these buildings and visiting the same sites
is considered
a waste of time.
Additionally
, owing to the lack of new sources of attraction, the repetitive
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visits
to these
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places
generate a feeling of boredom. Another
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reason
is the high
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entry
fees for every
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visit
, which
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often
discourages the
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local
visitors to spend money on visiting these
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places
.
For instance
, a
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famous
cultural site named '
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Sada
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Pind
' charges Rs. 1000 per person, for this
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reason
, the
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natives
avoid spending this much amount on every visit.

Nevertheless
, this issue can
be resolved
by taking
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some
effective actions.
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make
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attractive
for
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local
visitors cultural
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events
, exhibitions and animated
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shows
should
be organized
by the
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government
. To exemplify, in the
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famous
temple '
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Akshardham
' the laser
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show
is performed
that
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describes
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different
religious stories, this inculcates the curiosity for visiting the
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place
among
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natives
.
Next
, there should be free
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entry
passes for the
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local
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people
on
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some
specific days, this will encourage
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people
to
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visit
these
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places
more
frequently
.
For example
, the National
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Museum
in Delhi offers free
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visits
on weekends for
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local
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people
.

To conclude
, the
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local
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people
offer less interest in visiting historical
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places
and
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museums
, as they do not enjoy their
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visits
to these
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places
. To
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make
these
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places
more alluring, interesting
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events
need to
be organized
and free
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entry
passes should be
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given
to
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native
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people
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mostly visited by foreign tourists, but not by local people. Why do you think it happens? What can be done to attract local people to these sites? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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