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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract local people. v.1

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract local people. v. 1
It is true that historical places and museums attract a large number of tourists; however, locals show little interest in them. In my opinion, there are several reasons behind this trend and governments can take certain measures to encourage locals to visit. To begin with, People find it boring to visit such places. In other words, they are already familiar with their culture and history and perhaps have nothing new to discover by visiting the same museum repeatedly; therefore, they avoid visiting these places as they consider such visits a waste of time. A tourist, on the other hand, is eager to explore new places of interest in their destinations, and museums and historical places will help them to have a better understanding of the history and culture of the countries they are visiting. Another reason is that museums charge an entry fee which could be the major factor that discourages the local people. If a person visited it once, they would avoid visiting it again because nobody wants to pay again to watch the same artworks. Governments can take steps to encourage local residents to attend museums and historical buildings. First, authorities can organize cultural events and regular exhibitions at these places to provide people with a new experience every time they visit them. The second solution would be offering free tickets and discounts at the weekends so that low income and middle income families can visit. For example, schools can provide assignments related to the history of a country, and this will motivate parents to take their children to the historical museums to collect useful information which will help them excel in their studies. To conclude, local people do not enjoy visiting museums or historical places because there is not much they can learn from these places. Foreigners, on the other hand, are curious to learn more and more about their destinations and hence they make it a point to visit these places. The government can encourage more natives to visit by conducting interesting programmes like exhibitions at these places and offering free or subsidised entry.
It is true that
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historical
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and
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museums
attract
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a large number of
tourists;
however
,
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locals
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show
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little
interest in them. In my opinion, there are several reasons behind this trend and
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governments
can take certain measures to encourage
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locals
to visit.

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begin
with,
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People
find it boring to
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visit
such
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places
.
In other words
, they are already familiar with their culture and history and perhaps have nothing new to discover by visiting the same
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museum
repeatedly
;
therefore
, they avoid visiting these
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places
as they consider such
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visits
a waste of time. A tourist,
on the other hand
, is eager to explore new
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places
of interest in their destinations, and
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museums
and
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historical
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places
will
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help
them to have a better understanding of the history and culture of the countries they are visiting. Another reason is that
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museums
charge an entry fee which could be the major factor that discourages the
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local
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people
. If a person visited it once, they would avoid visiting it again
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because
nobody wants to pay again to
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watch
the same artworks.

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Governments
can take steps to encourage
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local
residents to attend
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museums
and
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historical
buildings.
First
, authorities can organize cultural
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events
and regular exhibitions at these
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places
to provide
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people
with a new experience every time they
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visit
them. The second solution would be offering free tickets and discounts at the weekends
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so
that low income and middle income families can
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visit
.
For example
, schools can provide assignments related to the history of a country, and this will motivate parents to take their children to the
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historical
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museums
to collect useful information which will
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help
them excel in their studies.

To conclude
,
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local
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people
do not enjoy visiting
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museums
or
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historical
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places
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because
there is not much they can learn from these
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places
. Foreigners,
on the other hand
, are curious to learn more and more about their destinations and
hence
they
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make
it a point to
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visit
these
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places
. The
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government
can encourage more natives to
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visit
by conducting interesting
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programmes
like exhibitions at these
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places
and offering free or
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subsidised
entry.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
37Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract local people. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6
Overall Band Score
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