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Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. v. 1
Some people believe that living in a horizontal city is the best, while the opponents of this idea prefer to settle in a vertical city. While there are benefits to residents who dwell in a city which consists of low-rise construction, I would argue that cities with skyscrapers and high-rise buildings offer more advantages. On the one hand, it is beneficial for residents to live in a horizontal city based on a few financial and security reasons. Firstly, people have to pay less for building services. If residents settle in a private house, they may save a great deal of money since they won’t have to pay for building services. Secondly, living lower to the ground is safer for inhabitants when emergencies occur. For example, if a fire starts in the home, they can quickly escape from the dangerous areas because the building is not too high off the ground and it won’t take much time to leave. On the other hand, it seems to me that living in a vertical city is the best choice. A city with skyscrapers will have more space for public usage because there will be less land used for residential areas due to the amount of people who can live in high buildings. As a result, the government would be able to use this land to build hospitals, schools or places for entertainment. Furthermore, it is much more convenient for residents to live in an apartment in a tall building which offers a wide range of goods and services, thanks to shopping malls and service centers on lower floors. In conclusion, while living in a horizontal city does have some benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of life in a city with skyscrapers makes living in a vertical city the better choice.
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in a horizontal city is the best, while the opponents of this
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prefer to settle in a vertical city. While there are benefits to
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who dwell in a city which consists of low-rise construction, I would argue that
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cities
with skyscrapers and high-rise
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offer more advantages.

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to
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in a horizontal city based on a few financial and security reasons.
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people
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pay less for
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building
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services
. If
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settle in a private
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, they may save a great deal of money since they won’t
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.
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lower to the ground is safer for inhabitants when emergencies occur.
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in the home, they can
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areas
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is not too high off the ground and it won’t take much time to
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On the other hand
, it seems to me that
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in a vertical city is the best choice. A city with skyscrapers will have more space for public usage
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because
there will be less land
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for residential areas due to the amount of
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who can
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in high
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, the
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would be able to
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this land to build hospitals, schools or places for entertainment.
Furthermore
, it is much more convenient for
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residents
to
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in an apartment in a tall
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building
which offers a wide range of
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goods
and
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services
, thanks to shopping malls and
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centers on lower floors.

In conclusion
, while
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in a horizontal city does have
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benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of life in a city with skyscrapers
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in a vertical city the better choice.
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IELTS essay Some people think that it is best to live in a horizontal city while others think of a vertical city. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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