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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v.1

Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v. 1
Food wastage has now become a big problem in many parts of the world. There are several factors that are attributable to this situation, and solutions need to be adopted to combat the issue. Primarily, people have become wealthier than before. Increased personal wealth means that individuals no longer appreciate food, and they tend to throw food away after eating rather than storing it in the fridge for the next meal. Fresh vegetables, meat and fish at the supermarket are now sold at an affordable price for middle-class people, so many of them are willing to discard the food as soon as they satiate their hungry stomach. Another reason is that the food industry has been developing fast, with a variety of choices and marketing techniques that encourage food spending. Television programs are often interrupted by food advertisements that are digitally altered to trigger the craving for a wide range of delicious food. It is, therefore, not surprising why consumers do not feel the need to preserve the food that they have not eaten for later use. However, food wastage is not an intractable problem. The simplest measure the government can do is to step up campaigns to raise public awareness with the aim of changing public attitudes to food consumption. The deleterious effects of food waste on the environment should be highlighted via posters and television programs to draw the attention of the public to the problem. Also, a heavy tax ought to be imposed on the food industry, which may causes the price of everyday food to rise and consequently deter people from taking food for granted. In conclusion, people throw food away after meals because of several reasons, which requires the government to take action to mitigate the problem.
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wastage has
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now
become a
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big
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problem
in
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many
parts of the world. There are several factors that are attributable to this situation, and solutions need to
be adopted
to combat the issue.

Primarily
,
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people
have become wealthier than
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before
. Increased personal wealth means that individuals no longer appreciate
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food
, and they tend to throw
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food
away after eating
rather
than storing it in the fridge for the
next
meal. Fresh vegetables, meat and fish at the supermarket are
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now
sold at an affordable price for middle-
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class
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people
,
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so
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many
of them are willing to discard the
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food
as
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soon
as they satiate their hungry stomach.

Another reason is that the
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food
industry has been developing
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fast
, with a variety of choices and marketing techniques that encourage
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food
spending. Television programs are
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often
interrupted by
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food
advertisements that are
digitally
altered to trigger the craving for a wide range of delicious
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food
. It is,
therefore
, not surprising why consumers do not feel the need to preserve the
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food
that they have not eaten for later
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use
.

However
,
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food
wastage is not an intractable
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problem
. The simplest measure the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can do is to step up campaigns to raise public awareness with the aim of changing public attitudes to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
consumption. The deleterious effects of
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food
waste on the environment should
be highlighted
via posters and television programs to draw the attention of the public to the
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problem
.
Also
, a heavy tax ought to
be imposed
on the
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food
industry, which may causes the price of everyday
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food
to rise and
consequently
deter
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people
from taking
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food
for granted.

In conclusion
,
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people
throw
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food
away after meals
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because
of several reasons, which requires the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to take action to mitigate the
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problem
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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