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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v.9

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v. 9
In terms of footfalls in museums and historical places, local residents have always paled in comparison with tourists from outside. In this essay, I would discuss the reasons behind this scenario and present some solutions to encourage the locals in visiting these places. The reduced interest of local visitors in museums can primarily be attributable to the lack of variation in the location centric displays and activities. In other words, displaying new exhibits or organizing innovative programs is few and rare which makes it monotonous to local people as compared to the newcomers. For instance, Bangalore Palace has seen only foreign sightseers, since, it has not changed its historical exhibits in the past 40 years. Furthermore, historical sites do not come cheap. In fact, even local visitors are often required to pay a substantial fee for entrance that discourages them from exploring these sites. Therefore, in order to drum up more interest of homegrown residents in coming to tourist centres, a number of measures can be employed. First and foremost, one needs to organise activities incorporating art performances which are not repetitive. This not only encourages the attendance of local people but also offers a great opportunity to educate them about their history. For instance, the Mysore Palace would attract more locals if it could organize regular dance and music festivals. Secondly, the authorities can also lower the admission fee or offer discounts to local inhabitants. To conclude, nation’s cultural and historical sites can be of little interest to local citizens being too familiar with the attractions they depict. However, with more open-door policies to use such locations for public-oriented activities and organizing educative tours for youngsters would popularize these locations among the local population.
In terms of footfalls in museums and
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historical
places,
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local
residents have always paled
in comparison
with tourists from outside. In this essay, I would discuss the reasons behind this scenario and present
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some
solutions to encourage the
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locals
in visiting these places.

The
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reduced
interest of
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local
visitors in museums can
primarily
be attributable to the lack of variation in the location centric displays and activities.
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, displaying new exhibits or organizing innovative programs is few and rare which
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makes
it monotonous to
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local
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people
as compared to the newcomers.
For instance
, Bangalore Palace has
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seen
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only
foreign sightseers, since, it has not
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changed
its
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historical
exhibits in the past 40 years.
Furthermore
,
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historical
sites do not
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come
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cheap
. In fact, even
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local
visitors are
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often
required to pay a substantial fee for entrance that discourages them from exploring these sites.

Therefore
, in order to drum up more interest of homegrown residents in coming to tourist
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, a number of measures can
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.
First
and foremost, one needs to
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organise
activities incorporating art performances which are not repetitive. This not
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only
encourages the attendance of
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local
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people
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but
also
offers a great opportunity to educate them about their history.
For instance
, the Mysore Palace would attract more
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locals
if it could organize regular dance and music festivals.
Secondly
, the authorities can
also
lower the admission fee or offer discounts to
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local
inhabitants.

To conclude
, nation’s cultural and
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historical
sites can be of
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little
interest to
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local
citizens being too familiar with the attractions they depict.
However
, with more open-door policies to
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use
such locations for public-oriented activities and organizing educative tours for youngsters would popularize these locations among the
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local
population.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case and what can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v. 9

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
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